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Light within darkness (Free verse) by Caducus

My love prayer left my lifeline through unholy steeples to a bitter bloodied orphan. God is a good listener his sign language silence the rain tells me doom his answer in brail. Jesus lays buried in me varnishing my eyes watching me cry the way he did for Magdalene. Our light of life is in darkness is in me God help you all the way God helped his own.

cyan9 5-Dec-05/1:50 AM
nicely meloncholly sentiment, but sadly void of other aspects of poetry (rich language, structure, rhythm, rhyme, assonance...)




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