Poemranker [Poem: Emma Barksdale] [by rahson_s] Fri Apr 26 20:29:40 PDT 2024

Demanding is a woman having difficulties living such a stressful life, a woman missing love, with her eyes wide shut, she looks down on us with the hate for her country engraved in her eyes, a woman in love with death, only she knows the feeling of being hopeless, all misunderstands her, a woman different in style, her life remains shameless and her time here on earth remains effortless, she is definitely having difficulties living such a precious life www.utopiawright.com

[9] cyan9 @ 84.12.172.126 | 8-Dec-05/12:28 PM | Reply

Ouch.

[9] cyan9 @ 84.12.172.126 | 8-Dec-05/12:35 PM | Reply

By the way, the site sends more chills through me the more I read. Heart provoking.

[n/a] rahson_s @ 65.217.153.100 > cyan9 | 8-Dec-05/1:03 PM | Reply

Thanks for the kind words. Im glad you enjoyed the site and the read..

until then..

Rahson_s-

[9] wilco @ 24.92.74.122 | 8-Dec-05/1:20 PM | Reply

I'm curious if you are the one who wrote this or if it is from Utopia Wright's journals. Also, I'm curious as to your connection to him.

The poem is good but the "definitely" in the next to last line bothers me..I'm not really sure why.

Other than that, I wouldn't change a thing.

[9] wilco @ 24.92.74.122 > wilco | 8-Dec-05/1:35 PM | Reply

Well that's actually pretty damn cool.

Regarding the "definitely", I was thinking that

"She, having difficulties
living such a precious life."

might be good..I don't know...whatever

[10] zodiac @ 69.132.67.140 | 9-Dec-05/1:40 PM | Reply

I can't make the utopiawright link work. What's everyone talking about? I want to see!

[n/a] rahson_s @ 65.217.153.100 > zodiac | 9-Dec-05/1:48 PM | Reply

i dunno.. it should be working.. www.utopiawright.com

i believe i spelled it right.. try again and let me know..

Thanks for taking the time..

until then

Ro-

[10] zodiac @ 69.132.67.140 > rahson_s | 9-Dec-05/1:55 PM | Reply

Okay, it works now.

[8] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 | 10-Dec-05/5:36 AM | Reply

Lose "eyes wide shut" or you might as well say she was "gone with the wind". I almost feel this would be better in paragraph form presented as a prose poem.