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Look Who's Talking (Villanelle) by OneFingerAnswer
God may listen but only the devil will preach
As you listen with head hung low
You can't hear god's silence over his speech
Crashing on the dark and cragged beach
The waves of his demons that won't let go
God may listen but only the devil will preach
Ever working on making the breach
Satan ever working towards that final blow
You can't hear god's silence over his speech
What does god's patience teach?
Only how to make losing slow
God may listen but only the devil will preach
Problems draining you like a leech
Raise your head and let him know
You can't hear god's silence over his speech
Everyone's out of touch but with in reach
Satan can help put on the grand show
God may listen but only the devil will preach
You can't hear god's silence over his speech
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Posted: March 4, 2003 10:11 PM PST; Last modified: March 4, 2003 10:11 PM PST
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Last stanza "within" i think would click better. Now, there is a bit of blah as far as the material involved goes (just my opinion i'm sure the bible belt would disagree) but that's the joy of poetry now isn't?
I'm glad you metioned the content because I want to get that out of the way early. This isn't about God and Satan as dieties or religious figures. Rather it's about "good" and "bad." One way I was taking it was the idea that good behavior doesn't attract much attention. I actually had one of my classmates from highschool in mind. He was a "good kid" and all through high school he was B/C average. Three days before graduation he ran himself into a tree in the car his parents had bought him as a graduation present. He lived through it even though he hadn't meant to. When I asked him why he did it he said "To be remembered." To be honest, I think it worked.