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Look Who's Talking (Villanelle) by OneFingerAnswer

God may listen but only the devil will preach As you listen with head hung low You can't hear god's silence over his speech Crashing on the dark and cragged beach The waves of his demons that won't let go God may listen but only the devil will preach Ever working on making the breach Satan ever working towards that final blow You can't hear god's silence over his speech What does god's patience teach? Only how to make losing slow God may listen but only the devil will preach Problems draining you like a leech Raise your head and let him know You can't hear god's silence over his speech Everyone's out of touch but with in reach Satan can help put on the grand show God may listen but only the devil will preach You can't hear god's silence over his speech

Jeremi B. Handrinos 4-Mar-03/11:54 PM
You know personaly i think you did well here.
Last stanza "within" i think would click better. Now, there is a bit of blah as far as the material involved goes (just my opinion i'm sure the bible belt would disagree) but that's the joy of poetry now isn't?




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