Re: Devictus by nocturnalism	22-Nov-05/5:01 PM
Why do you curse the gods for you unforgivableness? Still, it's a haunting lament.
Re: One Second by TLRufener	22-Nov-05/5:02 PM
I will comment and vote on this if you will promise not to delete any more comments that are not your own.
Re: No Worries by Dovina	23-Nov-05/7:17 AM
I have been accused, elsewhere on Poemranker, of plagiarizing this poem. I ask you, has plagiarism occurred when I cite the source and describe how I use it?
Re: The Rise of Dr Herbert Cyan by cyan9	23-Nov-05/7:40 AM
I take the good doctor as a creation of the character Marvyn Hyde. (You need to change the footnote.) It portrays for me the process of self reinvention, which I can relate to. Alchemy thought you were talking about drugs, and maybe you are.
Re: O dear. by celticskatermatt1	24-Nov-05/11:52 AM
It's the way of emotion, and emotion gets it's way. After "Due Consideration" (see my poem by that title) we decide by the seat of our pants or by what feels right. You've said it well.
Re: The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy	25-Nov-05/11:40 AM
I like the Islamic references, but wish you'd leave Bin Laden out. Would be stronger I think just showing the attitudes. And prestidigitation adds nothing over magic. Some good images, but some are vague.
Re: listen by elderking	26-Nov-05/9:08 AM
It seems a complicasted way of saying she ignores you.
Re: Colorbars by wilco	26-Nov-05/8:27 PM
"grey that’s been wearing down his soul" is good. No it's bad. Same for "kiss from old scars and lullabies."
Re: The copper man and Labrador by Caducus	29-Nov-05/5:17 PM
The last line might turn it into another Poor-man-dead poem, except for “shrapnel for our conscience” which I see as a painful wound on the collective sensibility – maybe because of the medal, or just maybe because they all agreed with the dog. Provocative.
Re: Virtue and Sin by dooley	30-Nov-05/9:15 PM
I presume all the quotes are from the 8-page poem. They seem scattered as shown. But the kicker is "Virtue for women is lower than sin . . .Virtue is a trait few women can see." Do you really mean that?
Re: Thunder by dooley	1-Dec-05/2:29 PM
I agree with zodiac, and if you stay here very long you'll know that's rare. You've don it again - put virtue lower than sin, at least to some. It seems a strange line at the end of a love poem. Too many words in many of the lines for my taste. But overall it's good.
Re: One by rahson_s	1-Dec-05/5:07 PM
More essay than poem. How does domination or elevation of a race affect equality among other races?
Re: Searching by celticskatermatt1	2-Dec-05/10:08 AM
Either you're trying to be funny or this is full of mistakes.
Re: Light within darkness by Caducus	2-Dec-05/10:13 AM
Could be a Christmas card, a kind of sad beauty. Jesus LIES buried.
Re: Calenders, Painters and the Boy who imagined Everything by avery	2-Dec-05/11:54 AM
A few suggestions: Use different styles if you want, but not within the same poem. Try for consistency of rhythm, like the rhythm you start with, for example. And try not to mix styles of language, like using "doth" (doeth)in a modedrn English poem. And try not use semicolons so much. And don't give up.
Re: For my unborn by Caducus	2-Dec-05/11:59 AM
In heaven SLEEP my children.
Re: Shoebox Thoughts by BrandonW	4-Dec-05/1:33 PM
She sat there staring at our old pictures wondering who was living then
Re: Popular Lovers by wilco	4-Dec-05/1:42 PM
It seems you're comparing a mill (sawmill, gristmill) to a run down apartment, or vice versa. Other than that confusion, it's cool.
Re: The Incubation by oneglove	6-Dec-05/1:00 PM
Wordy in places, but good. The long lines could be shortened or cut.
Re: laugh again by skaskowski	6-Dec-05/1:04 PM
How can the rim of a coin be a mobius strip? What metaphor?