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O dear. (Free verse) by celticskatermatt1 O dear. i think i lost it
my mind is going to have a fit
im in love.
o dear. i think i found it.
the right person in my life
im in love.
o dear. i know it.
its true, i can feel it.
im in love.
o dear. i hope it.
i hope you know that i love u
because
im in love.
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Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.4
Posted: November 23, 2005 9:27 PM PST; Last modified: November 23, 2005 9:27 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.9284782 Overall Rank: 9360 Comments:
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cyan9 @ 217.40.63.105
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24-Nov-05/1:54 AM
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O Dear, not another one. When will these people realise.... I felt compelled to give this a low vote, firstly on the basis that it lulled me towards the position of wanting to vomit, but not enougth so as to stick two fingers down my throat. Secondly it uses the word love a hell of a lot, without saying anything about your feelings or this other person, and so feels somewhat less than loving and more like a manic fad; whether that is the intention or not.
It's the way of emotion, and emotion gets it's way. After "Due Consideration" (see my poem by that title) we decide by the seat of our pants or by what feels right. You've said it well.
I predict you're not going to care what we say about this poem. Good for you. You'll show us.
good guess
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