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The Rise of Dr Herbert Cyan (Free verse) by cyan9
I fulfilled you and washed you of your tainted light. I cushioned you in the warmth of my tears, I held you and opened you into my life. Long would I lay by your side unseen, I watched as you lay restless in bed, As you tossed and turned your head, Drowning in your sweat. How could I stand there, do nothing Be nothing, while you needed my help; I took pity on you I created a world for you, A world where darkness wove a duvet to comfort, A world where in my darkness you could sleep. I empowered you with my lies, Delivered you from your descent, Delivered you from harms edge. I made you a rock star in your mind, I made your mother die 5 times a year, I made them give you their sympathy. I am your first great creation, Your first great self. I am Dr Herbert Cyan. <Footnote:- This piece is to be read side by side with "The Fall of Marvin Hyde" in order to introduce this series of poems >

Up the ladder: Passing of Wind
Down the ladder: Feelings for a Lost Love

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.3333335
Weighted score: 5.0397344
Overall Rank: 7080
Posted: November 21, 2005 4:11 PM PST; Last modified: November 23, 2005 7:46 AM PST
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[n/a] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 | 21-Nov-05/5:04 PM | Reply
Good, you decided to continue the story. I know you hate movie comparisons but often when I read your work I think "Requiem for a Dream". To me that's a good thing. I expect this series to be quite a wild ride.
[7] Dovina @ 209.247.222.97 | 23-Nov-05/7:40 AM | Reply
I take the good doctor as a creation of the character Marvyn Hyde. (You need to change the footnote.) It portrays for me the process of self reinvention, which I can relate to. Alchemy thought you were talking about drugs, and maybe you are.
[n/a] cyan9 @ 217.40.63.105 > Dovina | 23-Nov-05/7:46 AM | Reply
Ahem errrrr hum oh yes duh
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