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Colorbars

Member since 2004 · Posted 24 Nov 2005 · 8 comments

She sits alone beneath the cross of Grace St. Luke’s and all the neon, rain drenched streets. She takes a picture in black and white, dreams of all the colors, smudged and running down her face. He came back down from Eastern Time, a pretty wife and everything that anyone could dream. The television flickers, casting shadows of all the grey that’s been wearing down his soul. And the colorbars scream It’s getting too late to fall asleep. She stumbles inside with the telephone line crying that the rain never stops. and the erstwhile smile that lit her face in a former life returns and calls his name. Huddled inside, ‘neath the ‘no smoking’ sign, strange and grinning out loud, wrings his hands. The cigarette burns as the sunlight paints daggers across his face and the moment fades. And the colorbars scream It’s getting too late to fall asleep One more murder on a Sixth Street serenade she dreams. He fashions a kiss from old scars and lullabies placing it on her silhouette, he cries. And back downstairs to the screen gone black as the colorbars scream that it’s finally time to sleep.

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[10] zodiac 25-Nov-05/1:26 AM Reply
The best of your lyrics I've read. My only suggestions are drop 'serenade' and keep the last verse more naturalistic, like the others.
[n/a] wilco › zodiac 25-Nov-05/9:22 AM Reply
The last verse works in there as a fade out in the song. It reads differently than the others because the music changes somewhat at the end. The serenade is actually supposed to be promenade...I don't know why I wrote serenade...guess I was getting tired or got distracted or something.
[10] cyan9 25-Nov-05/3:20 AM Reply
Absolutely superb.
[10] Niphredil 25-Nov-05/6:04 AM Reply
Brilliant. *10*
[n/a] ALChemy 25-Nov-05/10:21 AM Reply
Cool. Like a screen play for Sin City.

Cyan9. I'm surprised you didn't point this out.
[9] Dovina 26-Nov-05/8:27 PM Reply
"grey that’s been wearing down his soul" is good. No it's bad. Same for "kiss from old scars and lullabies."
[n/a] wilco › Dovina 26-Nov-05/8:28 PM Reply
Well, you've confused me...is it good or is it bad? lol
[2] Sing4Jesus! 3-Sep-06/5:17 PM Reply
Incomprehensible. God forgive you. 2/10 and be blessed