Re: Seasonal Love by Bhaskaryya	14-Nov-05/5:22 PM
Nice, to put on his pillow at each season's beginning.
Re: Close To The Beginning by RawPunkGirl	14-Nov-05/5:34 PM
So few poems end well. Life should end well, why not poems. Are all poets working against what should be?
Re: Now and Memory by elderking	14-Nov-05/5:51 PM
Good. I'd shorten the first verse to give it more power: cast upon the canvas, sketched within my past, she waits for me. Or somesuch.
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Nov-05/11:01 AM
How many birds settle on a human's tree? Are they dumb?
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Nov-05/11:06 AM
Good flow and rhythm. "sins" seems inacurate. "The future calls" seems a bad shift.
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Nov-05/11:09 AM
Whimsical and carrying less content than poetic effort.
Re: After Fighting (More Blood Edit) by zodiac	15-Nov-05/11:16 AM
I believe now that you really love me. The way you would a fluffy little dog. It's touching, really. And this morning my hair looks that way. I'll release the knee from your neck now, knowing you'll not relent.
Re: When Did You Walk Away? by TLRufener	15-Nov-05/8:12 PM
I wish you had not deleted some fifty comments.
Re: Frenulum by BrandonW	16-Nov-05/7:26 PM
A device linking the front wings to the back, hardly seems like a flame or disease. Is she enjoying this?
Re: Aurora by Aetius	16-Nov-05/8:06 PM
I see no point in shrouding a thing like this. In allowing several ingterpretations, you do what I do, and incur the consternation of me. maybe you meant something particuar, maybe nebulosity. It seems to me that a poem should at least purport something, not paint lines pointing in all directions. It's ok if readers find other meanings, but some meaning should stand our like a basket of fruit or a tree.
Re: Gerry's Song by ALChemy	18-Nov-05/5:03 PM
I say this only because poemranker has corrupted me: "Sounds gay."
Re: Blackout, Amman, November, 2005 by zodiac	18-Nov-05/5:18 PM
I like the cousinship of man and devil, the take on the swine and Legion, mosquitoe/bug, Legion/prophet, and the waiting cross. The () seem distracting and could be done without I think.
Re: soon i will travel by ay deee	18-Nov-05/5:19 PM
Good, except for the mundane last line.
regarding some deleted poem...	18-Nov-05/5:20 PM
A cute dog-lovers poem. I'd like to see it with a punch line near the end.
Re: A daisy chain for Nina by Caducus	18-Nov-05/5:26 PM
If she married you in 82, why are you, as man, a widow in 83? Lesbians, or do you mean widower?
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Nov-05/8:11 AM
An antiquated feel to it, in rhythm and rhyme. I like to think poetry has more potential than titilation of the ear, that it can do that while stimulating thought.
Re: Amber's Witness by cyan9	19-Nov-05/4:35 PM
A good take on leaves and cycles. Line 2 seems to have an "and" and a "the" too many. Track marks in bark might better be under cambium - just a suggestion.
Re: The Fall of Marvin Hyde by cyan9	20-Nov-05/4:58 PM
Maybe the ficticious Herbert Cyan is more real than Marvyn Hyde. The parallel poem is not up so I can't say, only that what I used to see as the ficticious Dovina is becoming more real every day. She'll pop into life some day and stab a knife into _____.
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Nov-05/5:04 PM
The first verse is great except for "gilded." It seems strange that they come without avarice (notice the spelling) since most birds at feeders I have seen compete or follow a pecking order.
Re: i dream in nine minute increments by ay deee	22-Nov-05/1:49 PM
A 36-minute dream. Were you watching the clock?