poemranker ::The Incubation by oneglove

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Free verse № 123482

The Incubation

Member since 2004 · Posted 15 Apr 2005 · Edited 5 Dec 2005 · 8 comments

I know the sky’s not falling But I’m positive the roof is caving in The walls have gotten tighter Only Pandora's box remains There is no refuge There is no place to hide and bury my mind and pretend everything’s ok No blanket, no matter what the size, can cover these indiscretions Believe me I’ve tried. I’ve curled up tight Remembering nine long months, warm and fed Nine long months, only inches from the world we live Where things are good versus evil But apathy always wins It doesn’t matter how small the ball, I still lie exposed And no matter where my mind I still absorb the blows Ignorance brings only a slow and rhythmic death You can shelter me Let me nurture and grow Rejoicing in every kick, in every lesson learned And I, I will rely on You You’ll provide for every need;for any food, shelter or love I may need Keeping me inches from the world we live But I don't accept And I don't know why

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A favorite of thepinkbunnyofdoom.

8 comments

[10] thepinkbunnyofdoom 15-Apr-05/9:37 AM Reply
Well wrote. The first two lines were my favorites.
[8] Ranger 17-Apr-05/1:10 PM Reply
Glorious
[7] zodiac 6-Dec-05/2:01 AM Reply
[8] ALChemy › zodiac 6-Dec-05/2:36 AM Reply
It's a staple in commercial graphics. Which has a lot to do with why many people don't think of graphic designers as "real artists".
[n/a] oneglove › zodiac 6-Dec-05/8:51 AM Reply
which definition did you intend for this poem?
[7] zodiac › oneglove 7-Dec-05/12:46 AM Reply
The second, I believe. The real point is that people who whine about things whine about American culture becoming a hodgepodge of unoriginal sound bites, used poorly. I don't whine myself, but I think they have good some good points occasionally.
[8] ALChemy 6-Dec-05/2:32 AM Reply
Nice. It didn't floor me but it's nicely done.
[7] Dovina 6-Dec-05/1:00 PM Reply
Wordy in places, but good. The long lines could be shortened or cut.