on Jerk ?? Circle by horus8
16 Oct 2002, 2:35 AM
Top T action in the first stanza, and good reference to the spork, an underrated utensil. Your eye for detail never fails.
replying on One Country by poetandknowit
15 Oct 2002, 9:54 AM
I suppose the distance between you is chaperone enough. Still, it's good you've found such a connection. This kind of thing doesn't happen that often. You'll cherish it, I know, and take strength from it and maybe write ever greater poems. Ma and Pa Poemranker.
replying on One Country by poetandknowit
15 Oct 2002, 9:48 AM
Same linguistic root, if my schoolboy Latin serves me right. Whether burning or ardent the effect is the same, don't you find?
replying on One Country by poetandknowit
15 Oct 2002, 9:46 AM
Thanks for the translation. Good luck with the roots, whatever fruit may be borne. There's obviously something deep and churning going on. I've said it before, poets and urges should not be allowed to go together without a chaperone.
on d e e p e r by daniella
15 Oct 2002, 9:42 AM
If it reminds me of any Beatle it's George - 'Within You Without You', that kind of thing.
on One Country by poetandknowit
15 Oct 2002, 9:38 AM
I'm sorry, I don't know enough Spanish (or indeed any Spanish) and so parts of this are completely opaque to me. But then I guess it's not for me, is it Mrs God? How things have blossomed since I've been away! Oh and happy birthday P&K - I turn 29 next week.
on Rummage Sales by jessicazee
15 Oct 2002, 9:35 AM
I like the progression of this from street to street - there's something very solemn about the ending, the seriousness of leisure.
on words our Father by daniella
15 Oct 2002, 8:00 AM
What is the madness? The faith or the doubt of the faith? I don't quite get this.
on cornered invitation by daniella
15 Oct 2002, 7:58 AM
Very good - really rather erotic, i find, in a blitzed out way. Should 'them on the corner' be 'they'? Never mind. I love the sweat and the flesh of this.
on where once by daniella
15 Oct 2002, 7:56 AM
I like the transformation imagery and the idea of life changing and the constant drive of fertility.
on our morning bed by daniella
15 Oct 2002, 7:54 AM
This is great. I'm really enjoying your stuff, Daniella. The fragility of these images catches at the throat.
on unlucky by rosiebailey
15 Oct 2002, 7:52 AM
You could at least have rhymed the third couplet! You have an unfortunate life. Are you still a man?
on why i look like a man by rosiebailey
15 Oct 2002, 7:49 AM
Rosie - this is the future. Youa re a visionary.
on simple silence by daniella
15 Oct 2002, 7:38 AM
Oh yes, this is great. pared down to the finest possible point.
on Breeze by Nicholas Jones
15 Oct 2002, 7:32 AM
very suggestive and neutral (in a good way)
on Bowstones, 21st June 200 by Nicholas Jones
15 Oct 2002, 7:30 AM
Yes are good at sens eof palce, and tying it in with personal reminiscence to come up with something really resonant. Really strong.