Re: Homemade Greetings by jessicazee	16-Oct-02/2:42 AM
Harsh to all card makers! I have never before considered the ethics of greeting cards - this is sharp.
Re: Jerk ?? Circle by horus8	16-Oct-02/2:35 AM
Top T action in the first stanza, and good reference to the spork, an underrated utensil. Your eye for detail never fails.
Re: remnants by crin	16-Oct-02/2:31 AM
I quite like the internal rhymes you use. The progression of the poem is somewhat mysterious, but perhaps that is fitting as it ends in a surprise (but is 'pleasant' too weak a word?)
Re: a genius by moonUnit	16-Oct-02/2:29 AM
This is very direct, though I don't really understand the first/second love part - is that you? Or someone else? Anyway, you should forget this person and move on, you'll be happier.
Re: a comment on One Country by poetandknowit	15-Oct-02/9:54 AM
I suppose the distance between you is chaperone enough. Still, it's good you've found such a connection. This kind of thing doesn't happen that often. You'll cherish it, I know, and take strength from it and maybe write ever greater poems. Ma and Pa Poemranker.
Re: a comment on One Country by poetandknowit	15-Oct-02/9:48 AM
Same linguistic root, if my schoolboy Latin serves me right. Whether burning or ardent the effect is the same, don't you find?
Re: a comment on One Country by poetandknowit	15-Oct-02/9:46 AM
Thanks for the translation. Good luck with the roots, whatever fruit may be borne. There's obviously something deep and churning going on. I've said it before, poets and urges should not be allowed to go together without a chaperone.
Re: d e e p e r by daniella	15-Oct-02/9:42 AM
If it reminds me of any Beatle it's George - 'Within You Without You', that kind of thing.
Re: One Country by poetandknowit	15-Oct-02/9:38 AM
I'm sorry, I don't know enough Spanish (or indeed any Spanish) and so parts of this are completely opaque to me. But then I guess it's not for me, is it Mrs God? How things have blossomed since I've been away! Oh and happy birthday P&K - I turn 29 next week.
Re: Rummage Sales by jessicazee	15-Oct-02/9:35 AM
I like the progression of this from street to street - there's something very solemn about the ending, the seriousness of leisure.
Re: a t i m e by daniella	15-Oct-02/8:02 AM
You really know how to write about loss and longing. This one brings back all kinds of lost moments for me and I can feel exactly what you mean. I think your poems are great and this is my favourite.
Re: words our Father by daniella	15-Oct-02/8:00 AM
What is the madness? The faith or the doubt of the faith? I don't quite get this.
Re: cornered invitation by daniella	15-Oct-02/7:58 AM
Very good - really rather erotic, i find, in a blitzed out way. Should 'them on the corner' be 'they'? Never mind. I love the sweat and the flesh of this.
Re: where once by daniella	15-Oct-02/7:56 AM
I like the transformation imagery and the idea of life changing and the constant drive of fertility.
Re: our morning bed by daniella	15-Oct-02/7:54 AM
This is great. I'm really enjoying your stuff, Daniella. The fragility of these images catches at the throat.
Re: unlucky by rosiebailey	15-Oct-02/7:52 AM
You could at least have rhymed the third couplet! You have an unfortunate life. Are you still a man?
Re: why i look like a man by rosiebailey	15-Oct-02/7:49 AM
Rosie - this is the future. Youa re a visionary.
Re: simple silence by daniella	15-Oct-02/7:38 AM
Oh yes, this is great. pared down to the finest possible point.
Re: Breeze by Nicholas Jones	15-Oct-02/7:32 AM
very suggestive and neutral (in a good way)
Re: Bowstones, 21st June 200 by Nicholas Jones	15-Oct-02/7:30 AM
Yes are good at sens eof palce, and tying it in with personal reminiscence to come up with something really resonant. Really strong.