Re: Kindling by <~>	15-Oct-02/7:28 AM
This is beautiful. The rhythms are languorous like a long winter night, which I suppose is just what you meant. 'loose and smiling' is he? I just bet he is.
Re: a comment on Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof	15-Oct-02/7:25 AM
Well thank you. That means a lot.
Re: Safe Distance, 10-10-02 by Frass	11-Oct-02/1:41 AM
It must be strange, knwoing someone who's a victim of this weirdo. Thanks for your comment by the way - I don't know why 'Instructions to a Sculptor' has taken off in the way it has, but it makes me happy!
Re: a comment on Dilemma of a Crip by Ninoy_Instigator	10-Oct-02/8:07 AM
To be honest, though I am neither young nor a boxer, I might have taken being told to 'get the fuck out, or die' the wrong way. But what zero says is quite right.
Re: a comment on The Thought Of It by Christof	10-Oct-02/7:54 AM
Amazing really. Thanks for your assistance my dear,that's what this site is all about ain't it?
Re: a comment on The Thought Of It by Christof	10-Oct-02/7:36 AM
I'm not sure if this is an English/American thing, because to my ear the cadence works fine. I could change it to 'planning' or 'imagining' but then again that might lead your mind forward. Perhaps reinstating the question mark will cement the different clauses more effectively. Let's give it a go.
Re: a comment on The Thought Of It by Christof	10-Oct-02/7:27 AM
Originally I had a question mark at the end of line 3 - would this make it easier? What is it you find confusing in these lines? You may be right about the lastline...
Re: a comment on A Soldier's Promise by Ninoy_Instigator	10-Oct-02/7:24 AM
It's natural for man, all full of testosterone, to want to protect his woman in a caveman-stylee, but you also have to remember that the woman may have her own opinions and ways of doing things. Try and think of her as an equal, not a precious jewel to be guarded
Re: Walk in a dream (an ode to self help poems) by Bachus	10-Oct-02/2:58 AM
You didn't really need the last bit. It was quite realistically satirical as it was.
Re: Bishop Stortford by cacophony	10-Oct-02/2:50 AM
I had a similar experience when I fell asleep on the train and woke up in Reading. I don't know where Bishop Stortford is, though. Ace.
Re: ITS A SHAMBLES by lukehanney	10-Oct-02/2:46 AM
This is just how football should be. Muck and pies and hopelessness. It should be 'affiliated', but I don't care a rat's arse about the inversion.
Re: Nature by Reuben Spiteri	10-Oct-02/2:41 AM
Perhaps you could lose the last line? Your love of nature comes through loud and clear and the last line just seems to spoil your structure.
Re: Essential Love by unknown	10-Oct-02/2:39 AM
This comes over like a rap, good rhythms.
Re: why? by little_angel_maria	10-Oct-02/2:38 AM
This is a terrible story. You really should get some help from somewhere. Listen to god'swife's advice.
Re: a comment on Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof	10-Oct-02/2:20 AM
Well cheers. Care to give a reason why?
Re: a comment on Tugboats by poetandknowit	10-Oct-02/1:56 AM
Also the Irish stuff is 'Whiskey'. Check yer facts, Mr Strider
Re: one is leaving as i enter by Limness	9-Oct-02/4:17 AM
Because as flies to boys are we to the gods; they kill us for their sport.
Re: Obsessions by Nicholas Jones	9-Oct-02/4:15 AM
Sophie Ellis Bextor? Don't get hung up on geometry.
Re: a comment on Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof	8-Oct-02/5:40 AM
Thanks very much for that. I haven't encountered Bougereau before. That is very dramatic painting - Romantic period presumably?
Re: a comment on Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof	7-Oct-02/8:48 AM
Oh I see - but yes! I'll be happy to receive anything you think I'll like!