replying on Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof
15 Oct 2002, 7:25 AM
Well thank you. That means a lot.
on Safe Distance, 10-10-02 by Frass
11 Oct 2002, 1:41 AM
It must be strange, knwoing someone who's a victim of this weirdo. Thanks for your comment by the way - I don't know why 'Instructions to a Sculptor' has taken off in the way it has, but it makes me happy!
replying on Dilemma of a Crip by Ninoy_Instigator
10 Oct 2002, 8:07 AM
To be honest, though I am neither young nor a boxer, I might have taken being told to 'get the fuck out, or die' the wrong way. But what zero says is quite right.
replying on The Thought Of It by Christof
10 Oct 2002, 7:54 AM
Amazing really. Thanks for your assistance my dear,that's what this site is all about ain't it?
replying on The Thought Of It by Christof
10 Oct 2002, 7:36 AM
I'm not sure if this is an English/American thing, because to my ear the cadence works fine. I could change it to 'planning' or 'imagining' but then again that might lead your mind forward. Perhaps reinstating the question mark will cement the different clauses more effectively. Let's give it a go.
replying on The Thought Of It by Christof
10 Oct 2002, 7:27 AM
Originally I had a question mark at the end of line 3 - would this make it easier? What is it you find confusing in these lines? You may be right about the lastline...
replying on A Soldier's Promise by Ninoy_Instigator
10 Oct 2002, 7:24 AM
It's natural for man, all full of testosterone, to want to protect his woman in a caveman-stylee, but you also have to remember that the woman may have her own opinions and ways of doing things. Try and think of her as an equal, not a precious jewel to be guarded
on Walk in a dream (an ode to self help poems) by Bachus
10 Oct 2002, 2:58 AM
You didn't really need the last bit. It was quite realistically satirical as it was.
on Bishop Stortford by cacophony
10 Oct 2002, 2:50 AM
I had a similar experience when I fell asleep on the train and woke up in Reading. I don't know where Bishop Stortford is, though. Ace.
on ITS A SHAMBLES by lukehanney
10 Oct 2002, 2:46 AM
This is just how football should be. Muck and pies and hopelessness. It should be 'affiliated', but I don't care a rat's arse about the inversion.
on Nature by Reuben Spiteri
10 Oct 2002, 2:41 AM
Perhaps you could lose the last line? Your love of nature comes through loud and clear and the last line just seems to spoil your structure.
on Essential Love by unknown
10 Oct 2002, 2:39 AM
This comes over like a rap, good rhythms.
on why? by little_angel_maria
10 Oct 2002, 2:38 AM
This is a terrible story. You really should get some help from somewhere. Listen to god'swife's advice.
replying on Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof
10 Oct 2002, 2:20 AM
Well cheers. Care to give a reason why?
replying on Tugboats by poetandknowit
10 Oct 2002, 1:56 AM
Also the Irish stuff is 'Whiskey'. Check yer facts, Mr Strider
on one is leaving as i enter by Limness
9 Oct 2002, 4:17 AM
Because as flies to boys are we to the gods; they kill us for their sport.
on Obsessions by Nicholas Jones
9 Oct 2002, 4:15 AM
Sophie Ellis Bextor? Don't get hung up on geometry.
replying on Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof
8 Oct 2002, 5:40 AM
Thanks very much for that. I haven't encountered Bougereau before. That is very dramatic painting - Romantic period presumably?
replying on Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof
7 Oct 2002, 8:48 AM
Oh I see - but yes! I'll be happy to receive anything you think I'll like!
on Bottom by ThoughtfulSoul
7 Oct 2002, 8:47 AM
You need to punctuate and also it should be 'there are people' in line 2. I really do get the impression of your thoughts echoing around though.