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Walk in a dream (an ode to self help poems) (Pimple) by Bachus
I met sorrow In a dream last night As the morning dew It hung among my concealed memories. Like a child I was too tired to fight But as a man I listened to its story And this is what it told me. Do not be alarmed my son Truth is a rule You must never lock up Your feelings of hate. Can you see me in the corner? Sitting upon this stool Is this the path to my distant fate? Or could it be the hidden chest of burning fury? Hold my hand mother I have fallen in the night Listen to this tale my father Or are you in a hurry? Stop for a moment and turn toward the light Listen to me child I am no angel, nor am I a demon I wish for you to know that a man needs a reason. So be an individual and heed to your own Because your mind is but an unfinished painting It can change like a season.

Down the ladder: Got Balls?

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.7272725
Weighted score: 4.732178
Overall Rank: 11736
Posted: October 9, 2002 4:21 PM PDT; Last modified: July 9, 2003 4:25 PM PDT
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Comments:
[5] New Life Drug @ 64.175.39.248 | 9-Oct-02/6:18 PM | Reply
Self-help poems..yes...
[7] Christof @ 195.172.133.226 | 10-Oct-02/2:58 AM | Reply
You didn't really need the last bit. It was quite realistically satirical as it was.
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 > Christof | 9-Jul-03/4:26 PM | Reply
Yes, indeed.
[7] god'swife @ 209.179.135.62 | 10-Oct-02/8:00 AM | Reply
I braced myself for the punch, you were certain to deliver.
[7] Tintagiles @ 207.179.185.160 | 19-Oct-02/6:24 PM | Reply
I confess I really like the ending. Cheers indeed.
[6] Nicholas Monson @ 195.92.67.69 | 4-Dec-02/4:50 AM | Reply
The South Park School of Poetry. Quite enchanting
[8] http://mulberryfairy @ 216.195.144.189 | 12-Jul-03/7:23 AM | Reply
I like how human this feels. What do these poems in the "pimple" category have in common? Just wondering.
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 > http://mulberryfairy | 26-Jul-03/8:24 PM | Reply
Written horribly purposely.
[10] Fayt @ 65.237.254.50 | 10-Nov-04/7:36 PM | Reply
i really like this one, nice job.
[n/a] edpeterson @ 68.79.60.123 | 10-Nov-04/7:46 PM | Reply
smut
[10] Fayt @ 63.27.3.225 | 28-Aug-05/6:10 PM | Reply
wtf is up w/ the low ratings... i think this is a excellent piece of writing.
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