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Pimple № 19667

Walk in a dream (an ode to self help poems)

Member since 2002 · Posted 9 Oct 2002 · Edited 9 Jul 2003 · 11 comments

I met sorrow In a dream last night As the morning dew It hung among my concealed memories. Like a child I was too tired to fight But as a man I listened to its story And this is what it told me. Do not be alarmed my son Truth is a rule You must never lock up Your feelings of hate. Can you see me in the corner? Sitting upon this stool Is this the path to my distant fate? Or could it be the hidden chest of burning fury? Hold my hand mother I have fallen in the night Listen to this tale my father Or are you in a hurry? Stop for a moment and turn toward the light Listen to me child I am no angel, nor am I a demon I wish for you to know that a man needs a reason. So be an individual and heed to your own Because your mind is but an unfinished painting It can change like a season.

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A favorite of Fayt.

11 comments

[5] New Life Drug 9-Oct-02/6:18 PM Reply
Self-help poems..yes...
[7] Christof 10-Oct-02/2:58 AM Reply
You didn't really need the last bit. It was quite realistically satirical as it was.
[n/a] Bachus › Christof 9-Jul-03/4:26 PM Reply
Yes, indeed.
[7] god'swife 10-Oct-02/8:00 AM Reply
I braced myself for the punch, you were certain to deliver.
[7] Tintagiles 19-Oct-02/6:24 PM Reply
I confess I really like the ending. Cheers indeed.
[6] Nicholas Monson 4-Dec-02/4:50 AM Reply
The South Park School of Poetry. Quite enchanting
[8] http://mulberryfairy 12-Jul-03/7:23 AM Reply
I like how human this feels. What do these poems in the "pimple" category have in common? Just wondering.
[n/a] Bachus › http://mulberryfairy 26-Jul-03/8:24 PM Reply
Written horribly purposely.
[10] Fayt 10-Nov-04/7:36 PM Reply
i really like this one, nice job.
[n/a] edpeterson 10-Nov-04/7:46 PM Reply
smut
[10] Fayt 28-Aug-05/6:10 PM Reply
wtf is up w/ the low ratings... i think this is a excellent piece of writing.