replying on Making a Man by Christof
31 Oct 2017, 9:38 AM
Thanks Daniella. What brought you back to my poems after so long?
replying on our morning bed by daniella
13 Oct 2017, 2:22 AM
I'm still here! I got a notification that you read one of my poems. Nce to know someone still reads my stuff after so long. How are you?
on Graveyard(Cry of the living) by alvinb
6 Apr 2009, 6:39 AM
A lovely stare? Lovely forced rhyme, more like it.
on I want you by nicole081083
6 Apr 2009, 6:37 AM
I fully expect to hear this lyric attached to a Miley Cyrus song soon. I don't mean this as a compliment.
on battle of the sexes by i love my midget
6 Apr 2009, 6:35 AM
Your argument didn't really get you anywhere did it? Neither did your poem. This is a tiresome subject tiresomely recounted.
on Fake Door County Trip by jessicazee
6 Apr 2009, 6:32 AM
There a plenty of things I don't understand here - I'm being very stupid today, blame it on jet lag as I've just flown back from New York. For one, the title is meaningless to me; secondly, I have no idea what you mean about your trip to the store being handbasketed. However, I love the first stanza and the conversational tone of this.
on The Man Who Drooped by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
16 Jul 2008, 2:15 AM
'brownful' - beautiful. This poem might have been written for me. Was it? Was it?
on Teaching Beetles To Swim by Bobjim
27 Mar 2008, 9:15 AM
What is the point of repeatedly posting the work of Robert Rankin? Unless you are Robert Rankin, which it seems you're not. You probably think it's funny or postmodern or clever. It's only one of those three things, and post-modernism is just so old-fashioned these days. Don't you know that post-post-modernism has already given way to proto-neo-millenarianism?
on Trapped in a horseshoe by INTRANSIT
27 Nov 2007, 6:18 AM
No smoothing! I like this with its internal rhymes, the tripping rhythm, the abrupt caesurae. Stops you getting too comfortable, just like the barmaid.
on All tonight wandering along in the broken dreams by Prince of Void
3 Aug 2007, 1:29 AM
Believe me, it's over. Get over it, 'Meadows of owes?'
replying on Dying Candle by cheese.doodles
25 Jul 2007, 8:41 AM
Maybe that's all it is?
on California Bound by Dovina
23 Jul 2007, 3:30 AM
It's a funny poem, but metrically it ain't no limerick.
There are no unwritten thoughts here and it's wrong for you to deny that the thought could happen, because it did. Whether or not I have a mutant brain is another question...
Don't take the anti-Darwinist comment amiss. I was only being flippant. I do that too much.
Don't take the anti-Darwinist comment amiss. I was only being flippant. I do that too much.
replying on Summer Festival by Christof
17 Jul 2007, 1:22 AM
Of course, and she was grateful.
replying on Summer Festival by Christof
16 Jul 2007, 1:44 AM
I still don't know where you see the IPS, but anyway, I'm not very good at that sort of thing. Further investigation has shown that it was my wife thinking she was doing me a favour. I've told her not to bother in the future.
replying on Summer Festival by Christof
13 Jul 2007, 7:17 AM
You're right, and on reflection I go for 'lolloping' instead.
replying on Blanket Weed by Christof
13 Jul 2007, 2:40 AM
Glad you enjoyed and also, in view of Dovina's comments, understood it. I thought this was one of my best until her comments came back which then made me fear it was horribly obscure, so your comment has encouraged me. I think you're right about it, and about my last things, which have all been loosening up exercises really. Though if they're Frostian loosening up exercises, I can't be too upset.
replying on Blanket Weed by Christof
11 Jul 2007, 11:50 AM
It obviously is confusing, as the green fleece is the weed - the hand is the fish. You may be right about 'First'. No comma after water, though - the line break is enough pause. That would be too much and would add nothing to the sense. No punctuation lessons are necessary, thanks.
OK. So is it not clear? I thought that the hair image was plainly referring to the weed - a fish doesn't move like that, and usually isn't green, or fleece-like. Is the hand not clearly enough the fish? I also thought the title made it clear what the subject is. If it isn't plain, the whole thing is, so to speak, blown out of the water. Oh damn it.
OK. So is it not clear? I thought that the hair image was plainly referring to the weed - a fish doesn't move like that, and usually isn't green, or fleece-like. Is the hand not clearly enough the fish? I also thought the title made it clear what the subject is. If it isn't plain, the whole thing is, so to speak, blown out of the water. Oh damn it.