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Ode № 155230

The Man Who Drooped

Member since 2002 · Posted 2 May 2008 · 10 comments

Echoes of dung haunt the cloister And balm my face in shades of prune, And as each note grows even moister I pluck my bow to its brownful tune. Dancing cherubs parp in turn, Delighting in this swollen scene, And though my lips may lewdly gurn, 'Tis but to hail my love for thee. But passion riseth like the rose, And wilteth in the dying sun Where naked, now, I dance exposed And wilt where once the sun had shone. Suspend each awkward, flailing moment, And hold them in a flask of shame That I may drink my own atonement And relive every droop again. Then casting off, on seas of grief, I'll end this folly while I can For no amount of love's relief Could bid me turn my ship to land.

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10 comments

[10] Stephen Robins 4-Jun-08/12:28 PM Reply
Right, either age has wittled the Angel's skill to the crusty husk of a brittle old flange or the original angel handed over their details to a new angel who is simply dunce. -=10=-
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Stephen Robins 11-Jun-08/8:00 AM Reply
....Your words hurt me...

Would a dunce have rhymed "cloister" with "moister", or "tune" with "prune"? Yes, yes, I suppose he would. But he would not have rhymed "scene" with "thee", or "sun" with "shone", or "can" with "land". Those are not dunce rhymes, as witnessed by their absence from http://rhymezone.com

You should be ashamed of yourself, Stephen. Partly for your cruelty towards others, but mainly for your horrid physical appearance.
[10] Stephen Robins › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 12-Jun-08/8:58 AM Reply
How dare you bring the engine of my verse,
That rhymes with shepherd's purse.
I would be nothing without the aid of the 'zone,
And a truncated cone.
[7] nentwined 26-Jun-08/8:51 PM Reply
classic.
[9] Christof 16-Jul-08/2:15 AM Reply
'brownful' - beautiful. This poem might have been written for me. Was it? Was it?
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Christof 24-Jul-08/5:10 AM Reply
Yes. You're the protagonist. And Dovina plays the object of your drooping desires. I, on the other hand, am but a humble prune.
[n/a] Dovina › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 25-Jul-08/7:42 PM Reply
Really, is it true? (blush)
[8] amanda_dcosta 25-Jul-08/4:30 AM Reply
A lovely read.
[n/a] Dovina › amanda_dcosta 25-Jul-08/7:38 PM Reply
Please try reading it again without the tarnishment of indulgent optimism, striving to find essences within it that might, with forthright effort, yield its pungent insights.
[n/a] Dovina › Dovina 23-Apr-20/2:31 PM Reply
On second thought read is as Scripture.