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I want you

by nicole081083

Member since 2004 · Posted 12 Jun 2005 · Edited 25 Mar 2009 · 9 comments

I want you You want him I don't know what to do I'm going crazy within I want to taste those beautiful lips To feel them pressed gently upon mine And the touch of your fingertips Sends chills up and down my spine He has your kiss He's had it from the start But I'm sure he wouldn't miss Your qualities that stole my heart But you belong to him As we all know There's no way I can win So I have to let go

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9 comments

[n/a] Blue Magpie 12-Jun-05/11:11 PM Reply
While you may be feeling this very strongly, there is little in it that a reader can enjoy, as far as poetry is concerned.
[n/a] deleted user 13-Jun-05/5:01 AM Reply
Amazing that a poem titled 'I want you' generates 13 hits within six hour. I clearly gave mine the wrong title and failed miserably on 'recognisability' as well..
[n/a] zodiac › deleted user 15-Jun-05/3:45 AM Reply
A poem which has received fewer (or no) votes will show up more often in the random circulation, which is what you get when you type poemranker.com into your web browser. That accounts for most of this post's hits.

Which is rather like taking your date to a bar and vomiting before you even get to any stimulating conversation.
[n/a] deleted user › zodiac 15-Jun-05/4:02 AM Reply
Did you know that almost all Poetry Contests on Internet ban you from participation if you're over 25? In all probability, above poem is taken quite serious.
[n/a] zodiac › deleted user 15-Jun-05/4:30 AM Reply
As a matter of course and for obvious reasons, reputable (ie, you'd put them on your resume) poetry contests and journals have shunned online advertising and submissions. Of course, I love poemranker and a few other online poetry places dearly, but I use my paper, 5-pound 2005 Poets' Market for everything involving professional direction. If you don't have one (and if you take poetry anywhere near seriously - which I don't recommend,) get one.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub › deleted user 27-Mar-09/7:22 AM Reply
It's a title that anyone and everyone can identify with, n'est-ce pas?
[n/a] Bluemonkey 13-Jun-05/6:57 AM Reply
Write this from the point of view of a Rwandan refugee and you've got something.
[6] Freethinker1602 1-Apr-09/6:15 AM Reply
it's not so terrible, has a good ring when read aloud. gets mundane in the middle and not as good in the end. the beginning is good. don't listen to those jerks. what may help also, right in a code,images. say the person has blue eyes, you could write
"lovely blue jay
you flew away
before you even landed
you left my branches bare
i tried to catch you
but you're too cunning
emptiness makes my heart tare"

just a suggestion helps make the poem reading and writing more fun and interesting.
[2] Christof 6-Apr-09/6:37 AM Reply
I fully expect to hear this lyric attached to a Miley Cyrus song soon. I don't mean this as a compliment.