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Nature (Free verse) by Reuben Spiteri Inhaling the air,
Giving it back it again,
Soaked all over
As I'm touched by Rain
Feeling the Heat
As the sun chooses me
Giving it back again
As the wind takes it away
Oh, I wanna be,
The wind
As a spirit I'll fly
The Rain
As I drop through the sky
The Sun
As all darkness I'll tear
The Wind
As I'll be everywhere
Nature... Thank you
Up the ladder:
Where the Heart is.
Down the ladder:
Drunken note #2
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Posted: October 1, 2002 11:40 AM PDT; Last modified: October 1, 2002 11:40 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.899147 Overall Rank: 9883 Comments:
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vulcan @ 80.242.3.81
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8-Oct-02/12:28 AM
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7/10!Asia?we're friends I suppose!
Good poem.... I liked it a lot...
Perhaps you could lose the last line? Your love of nature comes through loud and clear and the last line just seems to spoil your structure.
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