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Bowstones, 21st June 200 (Free verse) by Nicholas Jones
On the shortest night of the year Beneath me I can see Manchester: The red bricks of my suburb, The grey stone of the city, The hospital I was born in. (though the confusing haze of heat and car exhausts ruins the view through my binoculars) Tired people must be running Through heat and dirt To catch buses on dual carriageways Feeling out of place amid The darkness, car parks, and light pollution, But I am far away from that: Though the city appears still and silent The Bowstones are truly immovable - Deformed stone crosses from the past, Cross-pieces long since missing, High up in isolated moorland - They reassure me, I grow cold and thoughtful Watching streetlamps switch on. A few hours ago it was a hot and horrid day on the crowded five o'clock bus home from work, packed in with sweating students and commuters. But now that is over; Instead I see a field, a hill, Dry stone wall with a decaying stile. The sun finally leaves the sky, I shiver. Binoculars yield nothing but yellow glare, Vague silhouettes of towerblocks, Or roads picked out by lights That shake with my hands. As streetlights grow brighter, The city glows, Predicting darker nights And wintry cold.

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Posted: October 11, 2002 5:37 AM PDT; Last modified: October 11, 2002 5:37 AM PDT
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[8] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 11-Oct-02/7:50 AM | Reply
please do stick with this, and steer clear of politics. you are so fucking good at sense of place.
[9] Christof @ 195.172.133.226 | 15-Oct-02/7:30 AM | Reply
Yes are good at sens eof palce, and tying it in with personal reminiscence to come up with something really resonant. Really strong.
[4] Tintagiles @ 207.179.185.160 | 19-Oct-02/6:23 PM | Reply
21st June 200? My GOD you're an antique. I didn't know they had buses back then...
[n/a] Nicholas Jones @ 137.44.1.200 > Tintagiles | 20-Oct-02/4:13 AM | Reply
It should actually read 2000, which is still a while ago. I've been plundering the archives at the back of my hard disk. Well, those that survived the great Windows 98 crash of spring 2001.
[7] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 18-Nov-02/10:36 AM | Reply
you sure light (i mean like) street lights i was hooked from the first parenthesied part..than it got a bit mono for med...not that monos bad, but don't you ever get out of the dark of winter FUCK! you're breaking my guitar strings over here for christ sake what? do you need a post card or something? here borrow my pea coat. 7.
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