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Free verse № 3252

where once

Member since 2002 · Posted 7 Jul 2002 · Edited 20 Jun 2003 · 4 comments

here where heat once rose from the belly, the color of our gatherings now pales. steeped in a memory washed away beneath us to run with the rivers down to a sea of silent waves singing a cradle song. eternal in its course, where once our paths clipped the limbs and wrenching vine's ripe wires. this pale fish rises in the day, its silver scales sprouting wings, to fly into a clouded sky. she mingles there with the moist matter of the heavens, in time to rain down upon the earth now barren of seed, where desolate empty hands furrow, searching the core for substance. for the silver fish_____________

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[8] Christof 15-Oct-02/7:56 AM Reply
I like the transformation imagery and the idea of life changing and the constant drive of fertility.
[8] Jeremi B. Handrinos 21-Jun-03/6:27 AM Reply
Oddly compelling enough
[8] richa 22-Jun-03/6:43 AM Reply
quite interesting, similar style to 'the force that through the green fuse drives the flower' by dylan thomas.

causing a certain feeling of rush of change of uncertainty
[n/a] daniella › richa 1-Jun-14/7:34 PM Reply
thank you. i revisited this and thank you all for your comments