Re: Floss by jauser	Dovina 85.169.62.90	2-Aug-05/8:16 AM
Figure out what you want to say. Then say exactly that.
Re: SO LONG MY BELOVED by prettyktm	Dovina 85.169.62.90	2-Aug-05/8:14 AM
Spelling errors abound, but mostly you need to refine what you want to say.
Re: Forgiveness by Niphredil	Dovina 85.169.62.90	2-Aug-05/8:12 AM
Strange how an act done in seeming rightness turns sour. Most people never forgive. They either go on pretending or they leave.
Re: a comment on Observation of a stupéfait by Dental Panic	Dovina 85.169.62.90	2-Aug-05/8:02 AM
The periods seem needed because you use some periods.
Re: writers block by Jesus' Pedometer	Dovina 85.169.62.90	2-Aug-05/7:59 AM
"To wonder of my pedigree"??? Have you nothing more worth wondering about?
Re: Rapid Eye Movement by wilco	Niphredil 132.68.1.29	2-Aug-05/4:28 AM
Lovely. I enjoyed your poem, it was a pleasure.
Re: a comment on BY ALL YOUR HEART by prettyktm	prettyktm 203.115.81.186	2-Aug-05/1:05 AM
Hi,maybe you're right.
Re: Observation of a stupéfait by Dental Panic	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	2-Aug-05/12:43 AM
Another possible title: Mouths wide shut. I loved the first two and last two lines. The others kinda reminded me of the theme song from Pocahontas.
Re: a comment on THE HANDS OF THE CLOCK by prettyktm	prettyktm 203.115.81.186	2-Aug-05/12:33 AM
HI,I can talk and understand the language of love and peace. take care.
Re: More drugs. by darby pyn	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	2-Aug-05/12:32 AM
Great flow. The last verse doesn't blend as well with the others. Your talking about your life in the first three verses and then you start complaining about smug people with no fashion sense and it takes away from how personal and exposing the poem is in regards to you. Make the last verse more about you and less about them. Otherwise a really good poem.
Re: a comment on More drugs. by darby pyn	darby pyn 207.200.116.197	2-Aug-05/12:30 AM
Thank you Dental Panic.
Re: a comment on More drugs. by darby pyn	darby pyn 207.200.116.197	2-Aug-05/12:29 AM
Thank you Penny. I appreciate your concern. it is from experience. my mom is still alive. I miss my uncle.
Re: Calm As Confusion by Miggy	horus8 24.130.62.63	2-Aug-05/12:17 AM
Â¥ou should be stapled to a cucumber and lukewarmed.
Re: Life is not serious by daggatolar	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	2-Aug-05/12:14 AM
God spoke us into being so that some day we might return the favor.
Re: Mandrakes by Caducus	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	2-Aug-05/12:09 AM
From what I can decipher. Your lover had crabs. So you "snapped" her neck and hid her corpse in a dumpster or something somewhere downtown. I've alerted the authorities. the Feds should be knocking on your door any second now. The first verse is pretty good but then you get all psycho. Seems to be a trend among young male poem posters. Though you may not be either young or male for all I know.
Re: a comment on Mandrakes by Caducus	zodiac 212.118.19.75	1-Aug-05/11:17 PM
Use some other image. Sorry, that's the best I can do.
Re: a comment on Wars Between Held Breath's by thepinkbunnyofdoom	zodiac 212.118.19.75	1-Aug-05/10:38 PM
Be better without the apostrophe.
Re: Observation of a stupéfait by Dental Panic	zodiac 212.118.19.75	1-Aug-05/10:37 PM
Cool. leaves', not leaves.
Re: a comment on THE HANDS OF THE CLOCK by prettyktm	zodiac 212.118.19.75	1-Aug-05/10:37 PM
Really? Why don't you talk-talk in double-double language like other Indians?
Re: a comment on This Just In... by drnick	zodiac 212.118.19.75	1-Aug-05/10:32 PM
Yeah, like if you'd been watching Al Jazeera during the war, you would know that during the invasion of Baghdad Iraqi soldiers electrified the floor of Saddam Hussein Airport, killing over three thousand American soldiers at a blow. There were pictures. True story.