| Re: a comment on "Good Bye" by Blindpoetry |
Blindpoetry 70.172.227.111 |
25-May-06/7:52 AM |
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| Re: a comment on The Cookies by Blindpoetry |
Blindpoetry 70.172.227.111 |
25-May-06/7:51 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Little Bird by Blindpoetry |
Blindpoetry 70.172.227.111 |
25-May-06/7:51 AM |
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If you have nothing worth reading to type, then don't "f*cking" type at all.
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| Re: Descendent by MacFrantic |
LilMsLadyPoet 64.12.116.14 |
24-May-06/4:51 PM |
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The periods/punctuation needs work. (need one after endure?)etc.
You get spurts of rythm going, then lose it.
drop 'the' @ streets...that line's a tongue twister.
willing me to spell...?to cast spells?, and fate is my undoing? is that what is meant there? all as one sentence it doesn't make sense. I can see this written on a subway wall somewhere...
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| Re: Shy, quiet by Ranger |
LilMsLadyPoet 64.12.116.14 |
24-May-06/4:41 PM |
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Without the title I would think this was a stage or script act of a storm...I love>
"purple rolling pillow
sky, clouds
Swift
glancing light
Pause-"
The (clever) format forces one to read it in a very cool way...and imagery is fantastic.
I like the last two lines, in a literal sense: as in, the Earth spinning away and out of reach of the lightning. I see that you are being so clever/intellectual with the writing you posted while I was out and away. This one is probably not really clear at first reading...or even at all, without the title. Perhaps the lightening should be more direct and less stealthy:)
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| Re: a comment on Freud Spoke Of A Mother's Tongue, But I Interpret Dreams by Ranger |
LilMsLadyPoet 64.12.116.13 |
24-May-06/4:25 PM |
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Wow...alot of conversation about this one...interesting to read comments!
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| Re: Freud Spoke Of A Mother's Tongue, But I Interpret Dreams by Ranger |
LilMsLadyPoet 64.12.116.14 |
24-May-06/4:24 PM |
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The first two lines need punctuation change...kinda stumbled there....Other than that, complex piece here...or you could just read it as association, free-thought/dream piece...either way I think it should appeal to most reading it. Good imagery! An owl with butterfly wings...I like trying to conjure that image.
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| Re: sick and demented by sk8boardandpoems |
Edna Sweetlove 81.178.225.223 |
24-May-06/3:49 PM |
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10/10 for muck; 0/10 for merit.
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| Re: a comment on to a girl from msn by francis nor capule |
francis nor capule 62.193.226.25 |
24-May-06/1:15 AM |
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That's the mystery.But let me drop you a hint, no I don't think she's from halfway across the world.
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| Re: Goa by amanda_dcosta |
crazyknight 211.74.198.37 |
23-May-06/8:03 PM |
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I would love to be in a place where an attractive woman attracts a zillion men, for they are men. Not like the places where the heart of men are carved in stone or corrupted by the strangest attractions......
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| Re: Numbers add to nothing by Caducus |
crazyknight 211.74.198.37 |
23-May-06/7:57 PM |
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not my type............no depth, no substance
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| Re: a comment on Horus8 & The Werewolves Live At The Hard Rock Cafe by horus8 |
horus8 24.126.116.245 |
23-May-06/7:56 PM |
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You click on something that says "Horus8 & The Werewolves Live At The Hard Rock Cafe" and then say "this is a(n) poetry site not an ad bee blah"? why fucking click on it then you reduntant guff whiner.
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| Re: a comment on Horus8 Live, a benefit for materialism by horus8 |
horus8 24.126.116.245 |
23-May-06/7:39 PM |
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They didn't vote me a wanker you mouth full of lukewarm nigger spunk. They voted (H)orus8 a wanker, some fuck pretending to be me, as usual. See, because you're British and utterly full of the same tripe you're making an effort to contrast? you have no clue what you're saying, or why you're saying it. No doubt why your people would sell their mothers to a gossip column for an assfull of fingers and another hour of tea and heresay. But other than that, how's the carreer? Precisely, you're just another fan, fondeling my stipends. Thanks for the thrust, and free ads.
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| Re: A Prayer For God's Soldiers As They Kill For Him by Edna Sweetlove |
TanHand 65.78.25.23 |
23-May-06/5:59 PM |
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"Up the ladder: leah
Down the ladder: IN THESE DREAMS FOREVER "
Welcome to hell. How does a titmouse carry so many textbooks? Tweet tweet (that's how). Props to Jeremi Handrinos if he's still around.
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| Re: a comment on 72 virgins (but the bitches ain't fun) by ALChemy |
ALChemy 71.75.176.68 |
23-May-06/5:46 PM |
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Yeah, basically I changed a word here a line there and in doing so desecrated ol' Jay-Z's song. I figure any score higher than 5 shows that I've bested him.
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| Re: Hunter Thompson, In The Off Beat Chance Of Cunnilingus by horus8 |
Edna Sweetlove 81.178.237.73 |
23-May-06/4:02 PM |
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Illiterate and grossly mis-punctuated. Up to your usual standards of bollocks.
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| Re: Actor by horus8 |
Edna Sweetlove 81.178.237.73 |
23-May-06/4:01 PM |
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| Re: Horus8 Live, a benefit for materialism by horus8 |
Edna Sweetlove 81.178.237.73 |
23-May-06/3:59 PM |
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More stupid advertising for your worthless "music". No wonder this site has voted you a wanker.
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| Re: Emotionally Unavailable by horus8 |
Edna Sweetlove 81.178.237.73 |
23-May-06/3:58 PM |
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Long winded self-indulgent unpoetic piffle.
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| Re: Horus8 & The Werewolves Live... by horus8 |
Edna Sweetlove 81.178.237.73 |
23-May-06/3:57 PM |
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Stupid self-promoting drivel. This is not an advertising location, mongol.
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