Re: dit da haiku by nentwined	Jill Stockinger 67.172.190.253	15-Jan-07/7:57 PM
someone had to write it!
Re: a comment on A Year Later (edited a bit) by Sasha	Sasha 128.135.230.18	15-Jan-07/7:55 PM
Yes, yes I do know the putative prescriptive difference between the two. "Lie" is intransitive present where as "lay" is either transative present or intransitive past. I had intransitive past in mind, my dear Dr. Toilet. But honestly, I find it hard to care. Furthermore, I loathe linguistic prescriptivism as I find it to be ignorant and pseudointellectual.
Re: Censor by nentwined	Jill Stockinger 67.172.190.253	15-Jan-07/7:53 PM
So the censor is XXXing all those thoughts or lines- like pee filtered in your body by the liver- still not a great poem, though I guess I understood it-
Re: standing outside the door by nentwined	Jill Stockinger 67.172.190.253	15-Jan-07/7:51 PM
The "don't bug me" I take it refers to the other person waiting to get into the bathroom, named in the title-
Re: knowledge building on knowledge by nentwined	Jill Stockinger 67.172.190.253	15-Jan-07/7:49 PM
doesn't do it for me-
Re: Recognition by nentwined	Jill Stockinger 67.172.190.253	15-Jan-07/7:48 PM
I liked this a lot! Could see an easy progression type poem- next stanza: Benefiting two..
Re: a comment on Fury by wilco	wilco 24.92.74.122	15-Jan-07/7:41 PM
I'm a bit rusty. Haven't written in a while. I'm glad tobe back and I hope to stick around for a while. You are the soapbox queen ;) It's fun to climb up there sometimes. I don't fault you for it. I was tired as hell last night and just not in a very good mood so this is what spewed forth.
Re: clay or mud (hertz donut version) by nentwined	Jill Stockinger 67.172.190.253	15-Jan-07/7:38 PM
An unfinished piece---
Re: do androids dream? by nentwined	Jill Stockinger 67.172.190.253	15-Jan-07/7:37 PM
Well said.
Re: innocent voyeur by nentwined	Jill Stockinger 67.172.190.253	15-Jan-07/7:36 PM
Excellent stuff!
Re: Fury by wilco	Dovina 75.82.85.162	15-Jan-07/7:32 PM
It’s the kind of exposition and soap-boxing I’ve been blasted for these several years, and the kind of thing I still get all gushy about. But “irony of fate is lost” – is too nebulous even for me. Good otherwise.
Re: a comment on Fanatic by Dovina	Dovina 75.82.85.162	15-Jan-07/7:23 PM
The most interesting returns from writing a poem are the responses so far from what I was thinking while writing and editing it that it’s as if the English language carries with it sub-cultures of meaning, invisible to me like the baggage of bacteria we all carry in our bodies. Yet, on considering a response such as yours, I see how it could be sincere, and how the poem falls apart if understood in that way.
Re: The Sleep Fantastic by nentwined	Jill Stockinger 67.172.190.253	15-Jan-07/7:23 PM
Very sing-song. I hear the last verse as a loud chorus sung over and over!
Re: selfhood, through extrospection by nentwined	Jill Stockinger 67.172.190.253	15-Jan-07/7:10 PM
And so you are! Kaolin Fire!
Re: ritual of now intensified by nentwined	Jill Stockinger 67.172.190.253	15-Jan-07/7:04 PM
Ahh! Cof-fee!
Re: The huntsman's revenge by Stephen Robins	Dr Toilet 85.210.196.90	15-Jan-07/4:17 PM
Doggerel but quite amusing doggerel. A bit tedious.
Re: Same old rancour (a yellow stream of consciousness) by ecargo	Dr Toilet 85.210.196.90	15-Jan-07/4:16 PM
Utter bollocks except fore the bit about pissing.
Re: Felice Et Eroticum Est. by Ulterius	Dr Toilet 85.210.196.90	15-Jan-07/4:11 PM
Bravo!
Re: Starving at Tiffany's by horus8	Dr Toilet 85.210.196.90	15-Jan-07/4:09 PM
How about capitals for "I" ? 1/10 and be grateful.
Re: A Year Later (edited a bit) by Sasha	Dr Toilet 85.210.196.90	15-Jan-07/4:08 PM
Line 5: do you REALLY not know the difference between "lay" and "lie"? How fucking tragic.