Re: Leap! by Jill Stockinger	mr cunt 85.210.255.94	27-Feb-07/5:17 PM
This poem shows you and ROCKMAGE (same person) are cunts, total and utter cunts
Re: Smiling by Jill Stockinger	mr cunt 85.210.255.94	27-Feb-07/5:17 PM
This poem shows you and ROCKMAGE (same person) are cunts, total and utter cunts, and that's being polite.
Re: My daughter found at the age of 28 by Jill Stockinger	mr cunt 85.210.255.94	27-Feb-07/5:16 PM
This poem shows you and ROCKMAGE (same person) are cunts, total and utter cunts
Re: Leap! by Jill Stockinger	mr cunt 85.210.255.94	27-Feb-07/5:15 PM
This poem shows you and ROCKMAGE (same person) are cunts, total and utter cunts.
Re: A Single Strand of Golden Yellow by Aetius	Dovina 75.82.86.162	27-Feb-07/3:53 PM
It goes along well in the first half. Then the logic of yarn that was once a sweater being like a person thinking she's less bright than she imagines, escapes me.
Re: The Laws of Life by lrustagi	Dovina 75.82.86.162	27-Feb-07/3:47 PM
It's an interesting attempt as unusual language. I'd prefer to see the Old English done with proper grammar though. You mix new and old in an interesting way, but if the old is not done properly, then people think you're just blabbing without having learned the form. A nice attempt at something different.
Re: a comment on Captured by Dovina	Quarton 12.206.226.220	27-Feb-07/10:44 AM
An excellent poem despite the criticism. It does have an erotic "flavor" in my opinion but the overall message for me is of a lesser, more platonic relationship and I believe that was your intent.
Re: a comment on Firestorm by Dovina	Quarton 12.206.226.220	27-Feb-07/10:24 AM
The imagery and flow is excellent. Can't believe you got a zero as this is one of the better poems I have read on poemranker. Cynicism is alive and well and for some, "it is better to remain silent and be thought a fool than to speak and remove all doubt."
Re: a comment on A New Deal by oneglove	Dovina 208.127.90.101	26-Feb-07/10:55 PM
Yeah, Dylan or Pete Seiger could have sung it. Not bad.
Re: You should not judge Until after death by Prince of Void	Dovina 208.127.90.101	26-Feb-07/10:51 PM
I've stopped trying to shed a little optimism in your "lines in this fatal misery." Carry on.
Re: Shoe Thief by Blue Magpie	Dovina 208.127.90.101	26-Feb-07/10:45 PM
It's cute and almost funny, but it rambles on and pays too much attention to rhyme.
Re: Thought by Quarton	Dovina 208.127.90.101	26-Feb-07/10:43 PM
Yes, I am the center of the universe and all being surrounds me. If I am happy, the clouds are happy; sad, the sea is dark. Improve the grammar, as half.Italian advised on your last one, and clean up some superfluous language and you'll have a nice poem
Re: a comment on Celui by half.italian	Quarton 12.206.226.220	26-Feb-07/4:37 PM
Good poem. One thing concerning the word "intent." You use it twice in the last two stanzas and perhaps "Our purpose is to be one" might work better. Or any word with like meaning.
Re: a comment on A Part of Me by Quarton	Quarton 12.206.226.220	26-Feb-07/4:13 PM
Thanks for the read and comments.
Re: a comment on Fuck Shelters, & fuck OutReach Court. by SupremeDreamer	SupremeDreamer 207.71.202.142	26-Feb-07/3:00 PM
Bow'ls, sir, bowl's. Btw, all those are words, they simply make use of hyphenations. :)
Re: good bye. by nentwined	mr cunt 85.210.206.184	25-Feb-07/6:51 PM
nigger dung written by a total cunt
Re: bipolar by nentwined	mr cunt 85.210.206.184	25-Feb-07/6:51 PM
you californian cunt. this is cuntsquirt.
Re: Southern Baptist Redneck Song by Edna Sweetlove	mr cunt 85.210.206.184	25-Feb-07/6:47 PM
Fuck those Texan cunts!
Re: All Hail! All Hail! America The Golden! by Edna Sweetlove	mr cunt 85.210.206.184	25-Feb-07/6:45 PM
Fuck those yankee cunts! Ship the cunts home in a body bag!
Re: A Prayer For God's Soldiers As They Kill For Him by Edna Sweetlove	mr cunt 85.210.206.184	25-Feb-07/6:44 PM
Great! You are a cunt, but a clever cunt, unlike the other cunts. You cunt.