Re: a comment on Abused Light by Greeny	Dovina 75.82.86.162	14-Mar-07/12:43 PM
Are you reading the long debunked King George Version, or are you astoundingly, radiantly ignorant of Scripture? Having made humans in His image, God indirectly made everything we made.
Re: a comment on Pedaling West by Dovina	Dovina 75.82.86.162	14-Mar-07/12:41 PM
But pedaling like a muppet is an excuse for poetry, as a brain drained of blood to service pushing legs puts out its best verse. I took off the training wheels after ten thousand miles and am practicing on the lower bars after thirty thousand. It has been a blasphemous ordeal, and one that’s brought a great deal of shame, but after this cross-country ride, I hope to have the experience needed to take on the Santa Monica Bike Trail.
Re: Grab Out For J. Christ! by Sing4Jesus!	mikeeb 207.195.60.154	14-Mar-07/11:43 AM
Your motives behind this poem are not clear to the reader, or at least not this one. There were times it seemed like a satire, especially in the fourth stanza, which unfortunately devolved into an exercise in Dr. Seuss wordplay. Other times your choice of language is deadly serious, leaving me confused. I won't say 'horrendous' or 'shite' but I would suggest asking yourself why you wrote this poem. You must have had a goal in mind - don't hide it from the reader. Take care.
Re: May Sinners Rot In Fucking Hell! by Sing4Jesus!	poetry_rancour 142.205.240.27	14-Mar-07/11:36 AM
I gave it a 5. Good beat and you can dance to it.
Re: Grab Out For J. Christ! by Sing4Jesus!	poetry_rancour 142.205.240.27	14-Mar-07/11:28 AM
Please, please, please crush me to death!
Re: Strung Out On Sunlight by J.B. Manning	mikeeb 207.195.60.154	14-Mar-07/10:49 AM
I like it - the beginning is strong. I might suggest having a second look at the ending, as it left me wanting. Perhaps the last line isn't even necessary? Leaving the poem as you started, with a sense of disorientation (It's 3am on Monday / or maybe Thursday of next week) might be more effective. Just a suggestion. Nice work either way.
Re: a comment on Settling In by jessicazee	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	14-Mar-07/10:05 AM
A somewhat wobbly negro chin
Re: a comment on A Lament For Alice by hungry_shepherd	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	14-Mar-07/10:01 AM
An unfeasibly square negro face festooned with inflatable lips.
Re: a comment on Hallelujah by hungry_shepherd	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	14-Mar-07/9:59 AM
A tremendously smelly vicar egg
Re: a comment on Within by drnick	drnick 24.247.112.155	13-Mar-07/10:58 PM
ecargo is also one that i like, i forgot about him. Ya, I've been meaning to email you, but I've also been meaning to not be such a pathetic piece of shit too...and most of us can see the failure in one or the other (or both). Let me tell you something about hotmail; they make jesus h. christ look like michael jackson when triller first came out. I don't know what that means. Anyways, hope all is well. later.
Re: a comment on Her Mitts by Nepanthe	Nepanthe 74.99.232.77	13-Mar-07/10:29 PM
..this may take me longer than I thought...
Re: Herencia Latina by Ranger	Nepanthe 74.99.232.77	13-Mar-07/9:18 PM
This is beautiful and it flows well, matching the theme to the structure as you did keeps it from sounding repetitive. Without knowing it at first I could feel a guitar in my hands... the strings along my fingertips and a current of song.
Re: The Fountain of Youth by miraclemaker	jesslew 65.95.232.161	13-Mar-07/7:19 PM
i like this
Re: Lycanthropes and L-dopamine by horus8	jesslew 65.95.232.161	13-Mar-07/7:18 PM
okay...kind of intense
Re: The Ren (The magic in naming) by Bachus	jesslew 65.95.232.161	13-Mar-07/7:17 PM
this is really nice i'll remember it for sure aw, it's so pretty
Re: Ferris Wheel by alverland theme park	jesslew 65.95.232.161	13-Mar-07/7:15 PM
i really like this very REAL
Re: Los Angeles by Dovina	jesslew 65.95.232.161	13-Mar-07/7:15 PM
does this follow the rules of haiku???
Re: terra incognita by horus8	jesslew 65.95.232.161	13-Mar-07/7:14 PM
last line was a surprise.. i like Toucan Sam
Re: LIVE FROM CHEYENNE,WY. "The Forgeters!" by horus8	jesslew 65.95.232.161	13-Mar-07/7:13 PM
i like the inclusion of a blimp this poem was stellar!
Re: a comment on Her Mitts by Nepanthe	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 63.212.164.106	13-Mar-07/7:03 PM
P.S. That boy wasn't me