what kind of flower? what makes it appealing? why "a few" - loose that. this tendency to put a descriptor to actions that you've already described (or should by other means) is distracting. Like "hasty" and "Heedlessly". and there's something unsettling about the real-time nature of this - the play-by-play, yet you put "yet unaware [that you trampled over the living]" - that retrospective though process pulls the reader right out of the moment. And really, the action speaks for itself, or could better do so. I think you could make this moment with the little twist (pluck) ending a fairly nice piece with just a little attention to the types of things I just said. Not that I have an advanced degree from an accredited poetry school or anything.

"things awry" is a little vague, don't you think - maybe a missed opportunity given the sparseness here. I think its better without that last line, really.

better!

nice with the crows remove all the commas, put a semi after "water" "separate" (spelling) interesting visuals and conclusion - consider changing "crows" to "blackbirds" (because you have "scarecrows" later on and the duplication is unflattering).

Pretty not bad - slowly and slow are too close "Remembrance" (spelling). What's it about - murrderrr?

Nice, the end did save it.

Not too bad. I thought it said American Shemale thouth....that could be an interesting poem....

I can't really give you any advice. Take Macs advice.

I agree with you on this, although I'm no fan of the Bush White House. I'm not sure what to vote on this, though. Michael Moore is an idiot, as are all the musicians and actors who put their foot in their mouth on a daily basis, but...what are you gonna do...

Now, normally I try to give at least constructive criticism if not positive, but I don't see anything that could make this better. Sorry, try again.

Now, this is pretty good, I think. I think it would flow better if you omitted the lines "Cathy asked her daddy" and "To which he replied". Making it read something like this: 'Where did Daniel go when he died?' 'Your picture princess' Cathy smiled as her dad fought back tears. I don't mean to rewrite it because it's good as is. It's just an idea...

While true, I don't very much like this one D. I think that it is just an observation that is drawn out into a needless poem. Sorry, I can't give it good marks. You set the bar too high for this sort of thing.

DAMN you got enough comments for this one, even though it sucks

I love how you named it so everyone will read it.