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black dog (Free verse) by wilco Coarse hair of black and brown
Confiding in the lamplights glow.
Home was somewhere long ago;
Remembrance coming loosely.
Rain and cold they slow the blood
and make for awful company.
Oil slick and chasing shadows;
befuddled by the rainbows.
Red on black and silent still,
She never saw it coming.
Up the ladder:
fire has its own logic
Down the ladder:
The Babe in the Alligator Pajamas
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Posted: January 19, 2005 5:35 PM PST; Last modified: January 19, 2005 7:52 PM PSTWeighted score: 6.111111 Overall Rank: 1112 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
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better!
Is it from the dog's pov? The "red on black" line makes me think it's an old dog, and the master needed to kill it as we do with old dogs.
lamplight's glow ;)
definitely a lot of interesting imagery here, though you've lost me with what's going on. someone suggests murder, and I suppose I could see that--but not enough. "black dog" makes me think (of a friend, firstly, but after that) maybe--a hit and run... or a car crash (oil slick, and chasing shadows). Well, the words give me a car crash, the dog makes me think hit and run. Can you tell I'm really, really lost? I'd like a few more crumbs of detail to piece the puzzle together.
Of course it sounds like it's about doggie roadkill but even if it isn't...-10- Good.
Awfully good/bad.
lamplights should be lamplight's
poor little dog. Good poem.
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"Remembrance" (spelling).
What's it about - murrderrr?