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black dog

by wilco

Member since 2004 · Posted 19 Jan 2005 · Edited 19 Jan 2005 · 10 comments

Coarse hair of black and brown Confiding in the lamplights glow. Home was somewhere long ago; Remembrance coming loosely. Rain and cold they slow the blood and make for awful company. Oil slick and chasing shadows; befuddled by the rainbows. Red on black and silent still, She never saw it coming.

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10 comments

[9] Shuushin 19-Jan-05/7:50 PM Reply
Pretty not bad - slowly and slow are too close

"Remembrance" (spelling).

What's it about - murrderrr?
[n/a] wilco › Shuushin 19-Jan-05/7:52 PM Reply
Oops, you're right...edit time..
[n/a] wilco › Shuushin 19-Jan-05/7:53 PM Reply
how's that?
[9] Shuushin 19-Jan-05/7:55 PM Reply
better!
[9] Dovina 20-Jan-05/6:33 AM Reply
Is it from the dog's pov? The "red on black" line makes me think it's an old dog, and the master needed to kill it as we do with old dogs.
[7] nentwined 20-Jan-05/7:40 PM Reply
lamplight's glow ;)

definitely a lot of interesting imagery here, though you've lost me with what's going on. someone suggests murder, and I suppose I could see that--but not enough. "black dog" makes me think (of a friend, firstly, but after that) maybe--a hit and run... or a car crash (oil slick, and chasing shadows). Well, the words give me a car crash, the dog makes me think hit and run. Can you tell I'm really, really lost?

I'd like a few more crumbs of detail to piece the puzzle together.
[10] Dan garcia-Black 21-Jan-05/8:44 AM Reply
Of course it sounds like it's about doggie roadkill but even if it isn't...-10- Good.
[10] wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 21-Jan-05/10:03 AM Reply
Awfully good/bad.
[9] Bluemonkey 21-Jan-05/1:04 PM Reply
lamplights should be lamplight's
[10] daveslady 6-Feb-05/12:28 PM Reply
poor little dog. Good poem.