A Picture For Danny

Member since 2002 · Posted 17 Jan 2005 · 3 comments

In a room of daffodils and monotone Cathy coughs on candles staring at number eight making wishes for nine - unravelling presents keeping red ribbons to wear in her hair next to disco âBarbieâ both wearing pale bandannas. ~~~~~~ Opposite was Danielâs bed until the movement of wheels darkened shiny floors and he returned in a desperate mothersâ cry folded pyjamas and quiet toy cars. Cathy used his crayons drew him with wings, a green smile and flowing orange hair - his favourite coloursâ¦ And he shined again on grey walls. Cathy asked her Daddy âWhere did Daniel go when he died?' To which he replied âYour picture Princessâ Cathy smiled as her Dad fought back tears.

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[10] dancin_n_da_moonlite 17-Jan-05/11:05 AM Reply

wow........this is so good.............
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[10] Beyond_Dreams 17-Jan-05/11:19 AM Reply

I always love reading your poems, you actully inspired me to me write one of my poems 'Religious Slaughter'. But this by far the best poem I have read by you :)

[9] wilco 19-Jan-05/5:07 PM Reply

Now, this is pretty good, I think. I think it would flow better if you omitted the lines "Cathy asked her daddy" and "To which he replied".
Making it read something like this:

'Where did Daniel go when he died?'
'Your picture princess'
Cathy smiled
as her dad fought back tears.

I don't mean to rewrite it because it's good as is. It's just an idea...