wilco19 Jan 2005

Now, this is pretty good, I think. I think it would flow better if you omitted the lines "Cathy asked her daddy" and "To which he replied".
Making it read something like this:

'Where did Daniel go when he died?'
'Your picture princess'
Cathy smiled
as her dad fought back tears.

I don't mean to rewrite it because it's good as is. It's just an idea...