Free verse № 136982
A tribute to our most precious Pearl
We grew up in a home tâwas yours
Filled with your love and warm embrace,
You taught us how to live our lives
In Jesusâ name and in His grace.
Your word was firm, you stood your place
For truth and love and care,
You gave to all who came to you
The impossible youâd dare!
With love you taught us right from wrong
With love you sacrificed
With love you bore your aches and pains
And not one bit youâd sigh.
Yet, still your spirit wouldnât rest
Until you did your best.
And Jesus from His throne above
Was always there to bless.
With pride we raise this tribute
To your name most precious Pearl
Weâre proud to be a part of you
To carry out your work.
We pledge to go today in love
As Jesus you did follow
And claim His many promises
Today and not tomorrow.
May God the Father, Son and Spirit
Dwell within your soul
As you did be to each your way
Grandmother, mum and spouse.
And may the divine Spirit
Grant you eternal rest
As you leave your earthly home
For the place you deserve best.
We know youâll wait for us to come
And share your home as always.
And, now we know the best way there
Is Jesus whom you did follow.
With pride we send you on your way
To where you now belong.
To Paradise â the Promised Land;
To our Eternal Home.
Eternal rest give unto her, O lord,
And let perpetual light shine upon her.
May her soul rest in peace, Amen.
16 comments
This is hardly the place to worry about sounding unsympathetic.
Tell her what you think. Even if she won't change this poem your ideas may effect the next poem she writes. Anybody who complains about valid negetive criticism as being cruel is a total pussy.
Amanda's poems would not be successful in my arena, yes. Neither would mine be suitable for hers. But in our own arenas, we're both aces. To be sure, the very best poetry is the best because it suits more than one crowd or idea of poetry - Frost comes to mind for being personal and big name; Donne for being lyrical, big-name, and devotional. And so on.
Should I insist on judging amanda's work by how well it would fit in, say, Atlantic Quarterly? Or an L.A. SLAM! reading? Doesn't that discount a lot of popular, enduring writing that's well-suited to its place?
Feel free to disagree. I can see why anyone would.
...but this dumpling leaves a sour taste in my mouth. There isn't a single poeme alive that couldn't be made better by referring to The Holy Spirit as The Holy Ghost. The King James Version learnt this lesson long ago, and amanda would do well to follow its example. The Holy Ghost is a Ghost. It haunts things. That is the definition of Ghost. Why would Bibles refer to it as a Ghost if it was some sort of special 'Ghost' that wasn't actually a ghost at all because it didn't really haunt things? The two defining characteristics of a ghost are:
(1) Haunting things
(2) Walking through walls
The Holy Ghost does both.
the holy ghost is
and lay you doowwwn
in a bed of roses."- Bon Jovi.
Oh yes. A great poetic device indeed.
'When the disciples saw him walking on the lake, they were terrified. "It's a ghost," they said, and cried out in fear.'
I also didn't mean Greek used the same word for spirit/ghost/breath; I meant Hebrew, Arabic, and Aramaic do.
That rarely happens.
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