I suck.

This poem reaches deep into the dark anus of failure and pulls out a plump loaf of such proportions it would embarass Violet Suede.

These coded interactions are interesting for riddle and bravery to risk discovery. Among the angst though are a few good lines - "Fact wrapped around fiction" because it's the opposite of the usual fiction wrapped around fact.

Honestly I'm illiterate, but goddamn, this was an inspiration. I have never read anything as good on this site. This may be an insult to you blue bloods, but I'm in love with this poem.

The last three lines blow it. How could you feel everything she does?

Scratch the first line. Line break after "teeth." I like this a lot!

Okay you have wounds, but that's about all it says. Fancy spacing and repetition cannot make it better.

My turn: In the beginning, it was simply the road that drew me. Black asphalt - a serpentine layer of coils laid down across the mountain, like God himself had decided to play with a cowboy lariat and , having tired of the game , let it fall in twisted folds to the ground. Theres more poetry in this opening paragraph from a motorcycle magazine than in all of what you've posted on Poemranker. It may be acrostic, but that's all. the problem is not us dear. It's you. When you start reading deeper poetry , then you'll start writing deeper poetry. Then the nasty comments will slide away like the snowmelt under the early spring sun.

Yeah, good point. Ignore the screaming malcontents with their petty little gripes and open the window for the mantis.

I liked it. I will say the truth and say it is not the best but it's good. Keep writing and you will get better at it.

What is the theme of the poem?

This makes no since to me....all i have to say is write when u feel emotion

THIS ROCKS ...see..ruella now thats emotion and thats writing

i love this one to... i can relate to it.....

This is prety good.....

no structure or thought .....i dunno are u forgiven?

this has so much meaning and feeling...i love it

Love it...t

I liked it

you don't need to feel that way...but the poem was ok keep writing