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father

Member since 2003 · Posted 3 Aug 2003 · 3 comments

i'm seeing something red blur away my vision could it be my words in hiding finally being written father it's been so long i see how your life's discrepancies creeps into your memory and now you wave my laughter by hoping money will fix your eyes if you just breathe come and hope it eases your backpains dry just like how i learned to lie i'm hearing something fall from the shelves i've tucked away we never said how much dust can gather day by day father it's been so long my patience's gone to waste my insticts came to stay where i lay them down to rest is where i've learned how to test the meanings of trust and expectations if you just breathe i hope it eases your muscle's pains i'll give it back with the apathy i've gained i'm feeling something break i'm feeling something break i'm feeling something break you've got nothing more to take

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[8] http://mulberryfairy 4-Aug-03/10:26 AM Reply
I think you mean muscles' pains, unless it is just one muscle that aches.
[9] <~> 4-Aug-03/10:38 AM Reply
nice rhythm. well done.
[10] Fearlesfan_04 24-Feb-05/6:33 PM Reply
THIS ROCKS ...see..ruella now thats emotion and thats writing