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I An Anew (re edit) (Free verse) by scitz
Sultry air rids my apathy, The horizon screens my regrets, My matinee of rectification. I think of my mistakes in life. Lost like a Catholic confession, Caught between the lattice slats of redemption, Needing forgiveness like a pasture needs a locust. My inner self is newfangled, I am anew, And all because I chose inner peace, Instead of loving you. Blinded in the eye of calm, I see a cloistered grizzled man, Feeding breadcrumbs to a quiet pavement, And see who I would have become.

Up the ladder: father
Down the ladder: Icecream Soul

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.8333335
Weighted score: 5.2241178
Overall Rank: 4277
Posted: August 5, 2003 9:36 AM PDT; Last modified: August 8, 2003 6:24 AM PDT
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[5] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 5-Aug-03/12:24 PM | Reply
de HABilitated man.
[9] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.252.72 | 8-Aug-03/6:30 AM | Reply
rids? or rides. thats the only thing that trips me.
[n/a] scitz @ 62.105.119.105 > INTRANSIT | 8-Aug-03/6:54 AM | Reply
rids amigo.
[9] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.252.7 > scitz | 8-Aug-03/6:55 AM | Reply
copy that.
[7] EAger to Offend @ 65.95.228.20 | 8-Aug-03/4:03 PM | Reply
Might I suggest "Caught in the lattice of redemption," as lattice implies crossed slats...
Title; I Am Anew. ...even though it's acctually my least favourite part of this work.
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