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My word, her word, and yours (Free verse) by thepinkbunnyofdoom
I never asked for this, The attention I am given, Or the focus I lack, As you can tell, I'm losing focus At the moment I'd rather say nothing Let what comes, come and be Apparently If I do though You dig our graves with the quotations Of a child, thinking of being a man I am flattered with your words But the art of candles and shadows Is in the mystery of what you don't see And the gathering of hints and riddles; Things you barely see, but believe to be there Fact, wrapped around in fiction Say what you like, you would anyway Think your words mean something to someone Because they don't, neither do mine So paint the picture as you see it What will that change?

Up the ladder: Windfall
Down the ladder: Instructions to a Sculptor

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Arithmetic Mean: 8.222222
Weighted score: 6.611111
Overall Rank: 595
Posted: February 23, 2005 6:22 PM PST; Last modified: February 23, 2005 6:23 PM PST
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[6] Crakyamuni @ 131.252.183.26 | 23-Feb-05/7:51 PM | Reply
A sense of "doom" here. I like that. Our words mean everything, especially "mine". Paint it black and "red", and add a bunny with a snake body.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 69.61.151.161 > Crakyamuni | 24-Feb-05/3:14 AM | Reply
Really, what good have my words done the for starving children in Africa. Until the previous sentence nothing, and even then, they merely point out the existance of starving children in Africa. Our words mean what we want them to mean, and nothing more, nothing less. In this case, nothing at all.

<3 Jason
[8] Dovina @ 12.72.5.145 | 24-Feb-05/8:19 AM | Reply
These coded interactions are interesting for riddle and bravery to risk discovery. Among the angst though are a few good lines - "Fact wrapped around fiction" because it's the opposite of the usual fiction wrapped around fact.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 66.42.251.54 > Dovina | 24-Feb-05/10:57 AM | Reply
Yeah, the entire second stanza is great.
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