Fearlesfan_04
on Extra Strength VaginexII (Free curse) by Wurt Kale by Shardik
24 Feb 2005, 7:11 PM
Damn...this shit is nasty
Are u a writer....i mean do you write stories? this was kool..kind of
The poem: Brilliant. The order is perfect as is the length.
uh... at least i get what you're trying to say....
uh?
Exciting!!!!
Very provocative
Beautiful imagery..
Great theme
Awwwww this is sad
Same damn thing happens here in Florida.When we get a hurricane warning, and they tell everyone to seek shelter.
Management will tell some of there workers if they don't come to work there fired, and you have some fools
that will try to go.
I'm such a bastard should i keep it open and add it to my woefully low 'happy' collection.
Well, you sent me to the dictionary. 3 points. I'm okay with girning and cantering, damson is a reach. 2 points. The construction is overall solid. 2 points.
The puntuation is good,somethings fishy about the opening line. Maybe a bit run on. It's also visually well balanced. 2 points. It's definitely worth "finishing".
Boss.
Line 2: sayest is singular, they plural.
Line 3: use "thee" to stay with the old English.
Line 4: the beat is off. Try morn delays.
That's as far as I got. You've got the old (yawn)English voice alright.
You know some of these people don't understand what the hell you are saying
Boss Man! Your fried!
I really like enjoyed this poem :) Very nice
Super, Ed. Glad to see you back.
Another great one.