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Night Work (Free verse) by forestchild7 As I wander through the night,
different beings speak to me;
Whether fae, spirit, human, elf,
they are my children, and I must listen;
The night holds many things,
and my secrets are but one;
As I fly, float, and dream,
the stars twinkle above me;
The full moon shines
and I take in it's purifying energy;
The whispering wind mentions my name,
and I turn and carress it softly to me;
My consort rides the night sky,
and smiles down on me,
loving me for eternity...
And time rolls on,
as I continue my night's work...
***April 28th, 2002***
Up the ladder:
For You
Down the ladder:
If We Must Die
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Posted: July 18, 2002 9:42 AM PDT; Last modified: July 18, 2002 9:42 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.6926384 Overall Rank: 12034 Comments:
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==Doylum @ 213.122.70.10
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18-Jul-02/9:48 AM
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Oh how offal!
If I see another poeme containing the words "whispering wind" I'm going to cut my face off. Great poeme!
I dunno..my night's work tends to involve a crowbar, a shovel and the nearest cemetary....
Are u a writer....i mean do you write stories? this was kool..kind of
I do see one thing that might help you - don't
use and anymore than you have to. As in line 12, the first and could easily be eliminated - another thing you can do is use commas instead of and, you will convey your meaning and it's much smoother. I really do like this very much. 229 view(s)
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