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Itâs the Management (Free verse) by Dovina Down the stairs we tramped
floor by floor
fifty to go
just precaution
because of some shaking.
Loudspeaker says, âGo back!
Earthquake over. All clear.
That fire you see in the North Tower
has no effect here.â
Our boss man says, âGo downâ
so we continue
remain in file
choosing years of admiration
over a loudspeaker.
floor by floor
forty to go
facing upbound employees
who call it a joke
and say, âGo back.â
Later we watch from blocks away
workers for lesser bosses
come tumbling down.
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Posted: February 24, 2005 10:47 PM PST; Last modified: February 26, 2005 8:00 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.192101 Overall Rank: 4640 Comments:
Boss.
Boss Man! Your fried!
We had an earthquake here a week or so ago. People just sat there with stupid looks on their faces until it was over. I'm telling you, if the big one ever does hit the New Madrid Fault, there's going to be a lot of dead fuckers around here.
Lol..that was good.
By the way, what's the job of a fireman during earthquake disasters?? May be they do have work, just that I'm unaware of it! ;) Nice poem!
I don't think you have a really good idea what you're trying to say.
G'mornin, D.
G'mornin' T-Driver. If your "Boss" comment above means that you think the boss in this pooem is a boss boss then you are the only one who thinks it means what I think it means.
yes maam. gonna post a comment on alfies poem. Introduce an old poet. You might find it helpful. I still go here sometimes.
I'm gonna repost it, and make it clearer.
9/11 was a tradegy for all concerned. But I think the term "boss man" contains redundancy, because all bosses are men by default. You might also consider replacing "lesser" with "female" :( -no vote-
A blatant and predictably sexist response.
You can't say 'a blatant ... response'.
Your the sexist one. You only made the boss a man because the stereotypical boss is male -- a preconception that we both share, it seems. Well, not quite. The difference is that I'm aware of my prejudices, but you're not. You're too busy telling other people off for being BLATANTLY sexist to notice that you're own sexism is far more subtle, far more sinister than other peoples's's. Indeed my own mildly chauvanistic outlook on life could only be described as "charmingly old-fashioned" -- hardly the sordid, deeply rooted inferiority complex you so happily secrete. In future, I would urge you refrain from sexing your characters unless absolutely necessary, thanks. -0-
I made the boss man male because he is a man. I believe I could have written it with a woman boss, but that's not the way it was. Could you have written this story with either gender as protagonist or would you just let it pass if the boss were a woman?
So this is a true story?
As told to me by a man in a bar who was in the WTC on that day and followed his boss down the stairs with ten other employees. How could it be otherwise?
Look, I know you stopped listening to me a while ago, but listen now:
I'm a trained feminist critic. That probably doesn't mean much to you, but it SHOULD mean I know how to handle the business of talking about whether things are sexist or not. I don't know what your job is, but I imagine it has something to do with handling money, and if I showed you a handful of quarters you'd probably be able to say 'that's not gonna be change for $100'. This is the same thing. -=Dark_Angel=-,P.I. is right, the poem is sexist regardless of its basis in real life, and you are more sexist than he is. Which is sad as your a bint and one lacking any other desirable attributes.
You've said all that unsupported blather before, but it's always good to hear it again.
What do you mean by unsupported? The support is that I have practically the only recognized training on the matter in the entire world.
Then you could at least have the common decency to plagiarise his life story in the third person.
It's neither plagiarism nor indecent to write a story told to me in the first person, but you already knew that.
Do you always go down when your boss tells you to?
lol, but no.
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Management will tell some of there workers if they don't come to work there fired, and you have some fools
that will try to go.