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The Green Emerald (Free verse) by ruella I will cross the many rivers
And journey over those damn places where
the ground keeps sloping up
My toes will be as sore as they need to
Because everything depends on finding
A rare, green emerald.
And when I
get it I will feel happy.
Up the ladder:
A Vision of Dark Desire
Down the ladder:
The Final Hour
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
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Posted: March 16, 2002 1:14 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:14 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.151897 Overall Rank: 13276 Comments:
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anonymous @
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2-Jul-01/1:24 PM
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you mean "dammed places"?
sweet.
Don't get it. Like your other stuff.
"my toes will be as sore as they need to?" ??? grammar, anyone?
straight talking. this site needs more. i hate, i mean love, to nitpick, so i would lose the and on the last line. i think that will separate it from what precedes and give you more impact at the end.
ruella.....none of your poetry makes sense to me. "my toes will be as sore as they need to/because everything depends on finding/a rare, green emerald" it's just so freaking stupid
beg pardon? I liked the imagery until I got to the emerald.. what's the point? that an emerald is the key to your happiness? if that's so, you're just demonstrating the worst shallowness I've evern seen..
Is seeking or fnding the green emerald the better ? You decide.
This makes no since to me....all i have to say is write when u feel emotion
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