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The Green Emerald (Free verse) by ruella

I will cross the many rivers And journey over those damn places where the ground keeps sloping up My toes will be as sore as they need to Because everything depends on finding A rare, green emerald. And when I get it I will feel happy.

silvertongueddevil 11-May-02/4:57 AM
straight talking. this site needs more. i hate, i mean love, to nitpick, so i would lose the and on the last line. i think that will separate it from what precedes and give you more impact at the end.




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