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Invisible Wounds (Free verse) by Fearlesfan_04
I have invisible wounds that noone sees but me. Wounds so deep that can't close. I wonder when these wounds will go away it's hard to say Because a new one opens everyday. Who will close these wounds for me? Will it be a friend or family? Can he or she stop my bleeding? Because day by day i'm wasting away and nonone hears or sees and even though a friend is here, the invisible wounds are still near.

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.75
Weighted score: 5.089402
Overall Rank: 6281
Posted: February 24, 2005 6:56 AM PST; Last modified: February 24, 2005 6:56 AM PST
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[5] Dovina @ 12.72.5.145 | 24-Feb-05/8:36 AM | Reply
Okay you have wounds, but that's about all it says. Fancy spacing and repetition cannot make it better.
[n/a] Stephen Robins @ 213.146.148.199 > Dovina | 24-Feb-05/8:41 AM | Reply
You can be such a bitch.
[8] RION12 @ 64.136.26.226 > Dovina | 24-Feb-05/6:25 PM | Reply
Man that was mean. Be nicer because you don't want some one saying that to you. If you don't care if some one says that kind of stuff to you then you should care.
[8] RION12 @ 64.136.26.226 | 24-Feb-05/6:22 PM | Reply
I liked it. I will say the truth and say it is not the best but it's good. Keep writing and you will get better at it.
[n/a] edpeterson @ 68.79.203.220 > RION12 | 24-Feb-05/8:31 PM | Reply
while we are saying the truth, let me just say you strike me as a very upstanding young man, albeit a slobbering epileptic simp
[n/a] Fearlesfan_04 @ 129.66.1.202 | 27-Feb-05/4:00 PM | Reply
Thanx for liking my poem peterson
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