of a tractor's or of tractors'

alot of your work tends to be good but it is extremely long and exhausting to read - might i suggest making it a bit shorter - it would be more effective and i bet more people would read it -emili

A lot of things there you say are true that I could argue with. I suppose you don't miss me, then. forced rhymes and erratic rhythm are painful to me.

cute. the beginning was a bit commonplace, and the middle dragged; the ending then felt rushed. I suppose the main complaint is that this is a laundry list, and those are nearly impossible to give substance too, even when this is entirely a story as well. I think you rely too much on the form, here.

ah, but have you yet considered the chance that history man never see you, how many people have you heard from 18th century france, or 11th century africa exactly

Definitely one of your better posts; I'd cut it after "Vesuvius". I think it would be rather good if you cut it after "Vesuvius", actually. :)

1) if it is on a site called poemranker.com why would you post that which is not a poem 2) it definetly sounds like a poetic attempt, I'm not quite sure how well you suceeded by it sounds like a poem to me 3) it was a good effort and I will acknowledge that so often the words to describe what we feel escape us and we almost always come up short in trying to describe both the happy and the poignant 4) all that aside i don't really care for this that much i give it a 6 -zarina

i like the intention but, i dont think we will ever have a Utopia, at least not one this earth, things can get better but they wont change, until people do and people haven't changed that much at all since the time of the grecians, thats 2000+ years of human nature working against you it would be nice though (the utopia) -zarina

i like this i do - but one comment - be more specific when you say she - it was a little confusing at times as to whether you were discussing the librarian or the girl....... -zarina

a tad to cliche to be really good -zarina

i really really like this! -zarina

i might like this better if i didnt have a strong distaste for rhyme -zarina

Why don't you?

i really like this.......... -lia

um, this was not, to be frank, very good a) we all have a days work to do, and you weren't really compelling enough to make me think yours was special 2)it was rather bland and run of the mill -lia

nice but it would be that much stronger if you took off the "i think" tell us, don't speculate! without that it would be a 5 with that change more of a 9 ill meet you in the middle and give you a 7 -lia

Other than her mascara (flowing). This rocks.

If the newbies read stuff like this,-and think about it or read twice before commenting- we might see some effort from them.

It's->Its (confused me first read) Interesting, though. Not gelling for me.

cheerful (10) (on a happire note my poem ALONE was published!!!!!!!yay!!!!!!!!0