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oops (Free verse) by jay_dace i think my memory might be
things tattooed on my brain
over time the colors fade
and lines blur and meld
with other lines
i piss people off by asking them
if they remember
parties they weren't invited to
Up the ladder:
Someday Soon
Down the ladder:
Calling My Essence From The Gap
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.5
Posted: July 19, 2002 12:59 AM PDT; Last modified: July 19, 2002 12:59 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.4034123 Overall Rank: 3112 Comments:
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-=SeTTle=- @ 63.214.98.27
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30-Jul-02/8:39 PM
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good one
me too- 4/10
nice but it would be that much stronger if you took off the "i think" tell us, don't speculate!
without that it would be a 5 with that change more of a 9 ill meet you in the middle and give you a 7 -lia 146 view(s)
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