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oops (Free verse) by jay_dace

i think my memory might be things tattooed on my brain over time the colors fade and lines blur and meld with other lines i piss people off by asking them if they remember parties they weren't invited to

crooked_smile 9-Mar-05/4:01 PM
nice but it would be that much stronger if you took off the "i think" tell us, don't speculate!

without that it would be a 5
with that change more of a 9

ill meet you in the middle and give you a 7

-lia




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