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To those that would teach poetry

by INTRANSIT

Member since 2002 · Posted 23 Jan 2004 · Edited 10 Mar 2005 · 17 comments

I'm sorry teacher, To push me through a poem, To force me to write Is to hold a pistol, Its cold, relieving, barrelled end against my temple That I would forge you a sword to be used against me later, And I say this: Hold your flint-lock firmly and let fly.

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17 comments

[9] Caducus 24-Jan-04/3:48 PM Reply
Love the notions of being who we ARE and not what others want us to be.

A real archers bowfinger to conformity.
[8] andrewjthomas 26-Jan-04/8:30 PM Reply
nice "FU"
one note, "Its" instead of "It's"
[9] Goad 27-Jan-04/2:25 AM Reply
Interesting, I don't read this as a FU at all, but rather expressing eagerness to learn and be pushed to learn even though it can be torturous. INTRANSIT?
[n/a] AuntyM 28-Jan-04/4:09 PM Reply
I concur. Well put, Goed.
[n/a] AuntyM › AuntyM 28-Jan-04/4:12 PM Reply
Goad
[7] nentwined 10-Mar-05/10:21 AM Reply
It's->Its (confused me first read)


Interesting, though.

Not gelling for me.
[8] Dovina 10-Mar-05/12:09 PM Reply
Why didn't you cahnge "it's" to "its" on this edit? It's been pointed out before. "forge you a sword" - don't get the connection. Otherwise good.
[n/a] INTRANSIT › Dovina 10-Mar-05/12:15 PM Reply
Slipped right past me , that one. The forge thing is suggestive of " see I told you you could do it." The fact that I used -sword- seems cliche to me . Dunno.
[9] thepinkbunnyofdoom › Dovina 11-Mar-05/4:13 PM Reply
That I would make for you something, you will use to judge me later(Still refering to the poem writing). The gun itself is used as a Judgement(I.E. Grades).

Unless I misunderstand entirely.

<3 Jason
[6] crystal4 10-Mar-05/1:10 PM Reply
this is very good because it says what the person is thinking.
[9] thepinkbunnyofdoom › crystal4 11-Mar-05/4:08 PM Reply
Its good because of more than just that. Look carefully, its actually quite a bold and beautiful statement.
[n/a] richa 10-Mar-05/2:32 PM Reply
I'm having a bit of trouble with the metaphor here. The teacher is metaphorically holding a pistol to your head by forcing you to write. 'And then I would forge you a sword to be used against me later.' It is unclear why the effect of holding a pistol to your head would 'forge a sword' or how that sword could be used against you. The end is fine, although I missed that you wanted pushing to write first time (it seemed unexpected).
[n/a] INTRANSIT › richa 11-Mar-05/11:39 AM Reply
See the answer to Dovina above and the comment by Goad. Though I do see the opener as kind of a hiccup.











[10] zodiac 11-Mar-05/9:54 PM Reply
"To those that would teach poetry" should be "To those who would teach poetry". But I guess that's the whole point.
[n/a] INTRANSIT › zodiac 13-Mar-05/5:27 AM Reply
Bingo. Someday I'll get the whole anthropomorphism thing. Thanks.
[7] nentwined 5-Mar-09/10:35 PM Reply
relieving?

interesting piece.
[7] nentwined › nentwined 5-Mar-09/10:37 PM Reply
kind of funny, kind of sad, I don't remember reading it before. But perhaps it's changed enough. :) I choose that.