Dovina
on Billy Collins by INTRANSIT
14 Aug 2008, 3:55 PM
My name is not Billy Collins
very good
You still here?
ska.
Clever.. though the elephant bit befuddled me slightly.
Blessed with eight.
The symplistic rhyme is why I give a six rather than a seven.
D, I think the whole first sentence should go. I'd like to see the carpets rise be your opener. But that's me. hope you and Kansas are doing fine.
I have wonderful memories like these as well.
It is good to see you posting again, its good to see some new work from the old guard.
Blessed with nine.
Ha Ha good fun!! Did I mention I teach...
You are all the product of VIRAL SOCIAL STUDIES MIND POISON!!!!!!
Crazy as it may seem, there is actually a story in this horrid evening of a "high" I prefer the natural high, (air) but to each his own.
get real!
Swallow it, you idiot! It's what you really want
Why do you add two poems? Is it because you couldn't wait to hear how awful your stuff is?
"oh but, you know, they're both talking about the same thing. it's really-"
FUCK. OKAY.
Well just fix the last two rhymes in the first poem. Too much... force. Didn't flow well at all compared to the rest.
The second poem, I find not horrible.
How do you expect to rate this? I'm actually gonna rate this and you put me a predicament. thanks.
sounds like rain to me, i like it
This was my weekend...