| Re: Hum by Nepanthe |
Blindpoetry 70.189.1.177 |
7-Aug-08/12:35 PM |
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is this the entire thing?
It's good as some kind of saying or whatever. But a poem?? give me more and we'll talk.
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| Re: Social Studies is for MORANS!! by T. Jonathron Remp |
Blindpoetry 70.189.1.177 |
7-Aug-08/3:37 PM |
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Unfortunately, I tried your poetry and not even sea salt helped it's extreme blandness.
Do you plan on being a horrible rapper when you grow up?
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| Re: WISHES SHE COULD FORGET and FLOWERS BY THE ROCK by iowajerms |
Blindpoetry 70.189.1.177 |
7-Aug-08/3:45 PM |
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Why do you add two poems? Is it because you couldn't wait to hear how awful your stuff is?
"oh but, you know, they're both talking about the same thing. it's really-"
FUCK. OKAY.
Well just fix the last two rhymes in the first poem. Too much... force. Didn't flow well at all compared to the rest.
The second poem, I find not horrible.
How do you expect to rate this? I'm actually gonna rate this and you put me a predicament. thanks.
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| Re: About Death & Hell? Hell can be a State of Living. by Don-Quixote |
hobojo 24.143.147.163 |
12-Aug-08/12:15 AM |
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| Re: Warlord by INTRANSIT |
Dovina 68.183.245.156 |
14-Aug-08/3:51 PM |
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Funny, the greener pasture and all that bovine fantasy. loved America / Loathed America - perfect.
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| Re: GOD'S MOST WONDERFUL CREATION by iowajerms |
Dovina 68.183.245.156 |
14-Aug-08/3:52 PM |
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| Re: Social Studies is for MORANS!! by T. Jonathron Remp |
Dovina 68.183.245.156 |
14-Aug-08/3:54 PM |
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Swallow it, you idiot! It's what you really want
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| Re: Billy Collins by INTRANSIT |
Dovina 68.183.245.156 |
14-Aug-08/3:55 PM |
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My name is not Billy Collins
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| Re: ayow by skaskowski |
INTRANSIT 69.23.141.215 |
15-Aug-08/4:59 PM |
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| Re: Gadgets and Poems by Dovina |
INTRANSIT 69.23.141.215 |
17-Aug-08/4:16 PM |
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D, I think the whole first sentence should go. I'd like to see the carpets rise be your opener. But that's me. hope you and Kansas are doing fine.
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| Re: rainfall saga 7 by Bill Z Bub |
FreeFormFixation 98.212.148.58 |
19-Aug-08/8:14 PM |
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sounds like rain to me, i like it
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| Re: Better Things by EAger to Offend |
Bill Z Bub 99.239.12.102 |
21-Aug-08/7:59 PM |
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| Re: 5 minute poem: section by Bill Z Bub |
SupremeDreamer 99.170.144.252 |
21-Aug-08/9:07 PM |
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It is good to see you posting again, its good to see some new work from the old guard.
Blessed with nine.
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| Re: enter, do. let up, let loose. by FreeFormFixation |
SupremeDreamer 99.170.144.252 |
21-Aug-08/9:08 PM |
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Clever.. though the elephant bit befuddled me slightly.
Blessed with eight.
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| Re: Are your eyes by hobojo |
SupremeDreamer 99.170.144.252 |
21-Aug-08/9:10 PM |
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The symplistic rhyme is why I give a six rather than a seven.
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| Re: Social Studies is for MORANS!! by T. Jonathron Remp |
T. Jonathron Remp 128.83.157.120 |
27-Aug-08/4:21 PM |
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You are all the product of VIRAL SOCIAL STUDIES MIND POISON!!!!!!
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| Re: Gadgets and Poems by Dovina |
Bethy 165.154.46.180 |
2-Sep-08/9:00 AM |
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I have wonderful memories like these as well.
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| Re: Warlord by INTRANSIT |
Bethy 165.154.46.180 |
2-Sep-08/9:03 AM |
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worn boots that don't know snow...good line...
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| Re: Social Studies is for MORANS!! by T. Jonathron Remp |
Bethy 165.154.46.180 |
2-Sep-08/9:05 AM |
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Ha Ha good fun!! Did I mention I teach...
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| Re: Smelly Scum Child. by Y2kSlamPoet |
Bethy 165.154.46.180 |
2-Sep-08/9:12 AM |
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Crazy as it may seem, there is actually a story in this horrid evening of a "high" I prefer the natural high, (air) but to each his own.
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