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About Death & Hell? Hell can be a State of Living. (Free verse) by Don-Quixote
You know the hell that your priest, daddy, mommy, Sunday school teacher & drill sergeant told you about? You know;- Oceans filled with liquid flame, the roaring waves of the wretched wailing, flailing. The forsaken, sad, cursed multitude pressed together-- melted flesh the cruel adhesive that bonds them all into one writhing mass. No doubt you've imagined the Demons, exact with their cruelty, ruthless with the application of suffering; & Lucifer the sadistic over-seer ensuring that the cleansing of sin -bound souls is done without mercy. Yeah... How complex our silly imaginations are. Could not hell be something so simple, yet so harrowing that you're left surprised?-- shocked that the mere act of no action could be so effective & savagely brutal. But see this sort of hell has nothing, nothing at all to do with death-- a living situation that has nothing, nothing at all to do with the here-after. This sort of hell begins with the tik-tock, tik-tock, tik-tock of the clock ticking away at the haunting hour-- irritating even as it slowly fades into the background, leaving only silence in it's wake. Nothing stirs here. Nothing. No laughter, cries, moans;- an absence of bodies in motion or someone elses facial contortions-- Nothing, void, wakeful emptiness. Here in this darkness there is no physical pain, no roaring flames-- it is, you could say, perhaps even cold, shivering though it's summer. This suffering is beheld only in the prison of ones own mind & its' frustrated thoughts turning, turning-- depressive thoughts unceasing, spirit unraveling on the thought of embracing that friend called death with relief. One could easily sit in this darkness & soon enough suddenly become gripped by the rotting fingertips of panic-- driven to scream in order to break the silence, put a halt to the procession of thoughts bent on the idea of rage & bloody self-infliction. All that wasted energy, it's a pity. You're just left with the feeling of breath lost only to be answered with the echo of your anguish-- soon too that also fades to be replaced by silence. You close your wanting eyes, drink bitter alcoholism, till you plunder finally into restless slumber, your last thought before blessed unconsciousness is the hope that your eyes might not open to the morning after-- Hope that you will not ever, ever awaken again.

Up the ladder: Fall of all
Down the ladder: A Child Once More

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.4
Weighted score: 4.9284782
Overall Rank: 9363
Posted: July 29, 2008 4:54 PM PDT; Last modified: July 29, 2008 4:54 PM PDT
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Comments:
[2] Tyler J. Mancini @ 71.85.145.48 | 29-Jul-08/8:35 PM | Reply
My excrement is more captivating than this.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 76.254.27.93 > Tyler J. Mancini | 29-Jul-08/8:42 PM | Reply
Awww, how precious. You have multiple monikers TOO! And some proxy skillz!?>!??!?! -yawn- What next, you gonna zero bomb my work into the worst list? -Shrug- Been there kiddo, done that, but atleast you've moved on from the "SHUT UP" stage.

Hold on to your testicles, this just might get irritating.
[2] T. Jonathron Remp @ 128.83.157.120 | 29-Jul-08/8:35 PM | Reply
Autodefenestrate
[10] hobojo @ 24.143.147.163 | 12-Aug-08/12:15 AM | Reply
This was my weekend...
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 64.9.235.183 > hobojo | 4-Sep-08/11:30 AM | Reply
Ah.. and this was the many nights, days, and moments which I've long ceased to count. It comes... it goes... I manifest illusion into destiny, fate twisted on the corner streets of reality.

Thanks for the vote hobojo.
[10] hobojo @ 24.143.147.163 > SupremeDreamer | 4-Dec-08/4:23 PM | Reply
I again come back to your poem... it really captures my current state, evaluating my inability to engage in life - thank you for writing this.
[n/a] DreamerSupreme @ 75.18.164.147 > hobojo | 15-Dec-08/7:45 AM | Reply
Your welcome. Take the anguish and conjure up the soul-- it is painful but, none-the-less, necessary.
[8] deleted user @ 68.120.225.169 | 29-Sep-08/6:10 PM | Reply
You depraved hobo; I've been trying to get a hold of you...
[8] deleted user @ 68.120.225.169 | 29-Sep-08/6:18 PM | Reply
Dear Supreme Dreamer (or whatever the fuck your name is),

I've had immeasurable difficulty maintaining a 'positive attitude' in these dire times. If anyone's to help, it'd be you!

email me. tht19832000@yahoo.com
[n/a] DreamerSupreme @ 75.18.164.147 > deleted user | 15-Dec-08/7:43 AM | Reply
Tom, you know my fucking name. It's Lee. The same name I had when we were shooting up heroin in the bushes lining the chapel we camped at in Portland. !DOH!
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