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Hum (Free verse) by Nepanthe Electric blue dragonfly on a live wire,
vibrate in a dirge as a string on a lyre.
Up the ladder:
Tide
Down the ladder:
Hurt
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Posted: August 6, 2008 9:37 AM PDT; Last modified: August 6, 2008 9:37 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.2384057 Overall Rank: 4140 Comments:
excellent intro, middle and end...a full-bodied poem :)
This should be termed either a "micro poem" or a "teaser poem". It seems as if you conjured up an awesome outline of a mighty centurions' head and never got around to giving him a body in which to conduct battle. I demand that this warrior be given flesh, blood, and a wicked keen blade!!
I want to say eight, or even nine at this point;- but since you left your behemoth wanting, I am forced to give this a five. 193 view(s)
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It's good as some kind of saying or whatever. But a poem?? give me more and we'll talk.