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Warlord (Free verse) by INTRANSIT
I should have been born a Columbian warlord married a Bolivian drove a Humvee loved America Loathed America sent my drugs there drank till my nerves were wired like an afro. Been flush with guts and heat worn boots that don't know snow and loaded myself with subordinates. I should have been born.

Up the ladder: Bonded
Down the ladder: bluebells and none

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Arithmetic Mean: 8.6
Weighted score: 5.4291306
Overall Rank: 3022
Posted: August 13, 2008 8:23 AM PDT; Last modified: August 13, 2008 8:23 AM PDT
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[9] Dovina @ 68.183.245.156 | 14-Aug-08/3:51 PM | Reply
Funny, the greener pasture and all that bovine fantasy. loved America / Loathed America - perfect.
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 69.23.141.215 > Dovina | 15-Aug-08/11:31 AM | Reply
Oh. 'Allo D. whatchadoin?
[9] Dovina @ 68.183.245.248 > INTRANSIT | 15-Aug-08/9:00 PM | Reply
Writin' just as much and just as wonderin'. Never get it, always try, keep askin', seldom find why. Guess I could post here more, already got more than anybody, and more in the Q. More what? Yeah, don't go there.
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 69.23.141.215 > Dovina | 16-Aug-08/12:41 PM | Reply
Mnyeah. hit a slow spot myself. grindin' my way out. is there any other?
[9] SupremeDreamer @ 64.9.233.156 > INTRANSIT | 5-Sep-08/6:54 PM | Reply
You think you're in a slow spot? I'm in gridlock on the 101 North carpool lane gettin out of Hollywood & the smog hell shroud of LA. Inspiration hasn't had an electric storm in my area for sometime;- sad days for a veteran lightning rod.
[8] Bethy @ 165.154.46.180 | 2-Sep-08/9:03 AM | Reply
worn boots that don't know snow...good line...
[9] SupremeDreamer @ 64.9.233.156 | 5-Sep-08/6:50 PM | Reply
Pablo Escobar.

I think the last line should be:

"I'd have been better than Pablo."

And may I suggest the title "Rebirth & Cocaine Jungles."?
[10] http://mulberryfairy @ 207.5.157.235 | 7-Dec-09/3:45 PM | Reply
I love "drank till my nerves were /wired like an afro". Well done.
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