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Warlord (Free verse) by INTRANSIT I should have been born
a Columbian warlord
married a Bolivian
drove a Humvee
loved America
Loathed America
sent my drugs there
drank till my nerves were
wired like an afro.
Been flush with guts
and heat
worn boots that don't
know snow and loaded
myself with subordinates.
I should have been born.
Up the ladder:
A country called Cha
Down the ladder:
Blues
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Posted: August 13, 2008 8:23 AM PDT; Last modified: August 13, 2008 8:23 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.4291306 Overall Rank: 3023 Comments:
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Dovina @ 68.183.245.156
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14-Aug-08/3:51 PM
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Funny, the greener pasture and all that bovine fantasy. loved America / Loathed America - perfect.
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INTRANSIT @ 69.23.141.215
> Dovina
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15-Aug-08/11:31 AM
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Oh. 'Allo D. whatchadoin?
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Dovina @ 68.183.245.248
> INTRANSIT
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15-Aug-08/9:00 PM
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Writin' just as much and just as wonderin'. Never get it, always try, keep askin', seldom find why. Guess I could post here more, already got more than anybody, and more in the Q. More what? Yeah, don't go there.
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INTRANSIT @ 69.23.141.215
> Dovina
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16-Aug-08/12:41 PM
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Mnyeah. hit a slow spot myself. grindin' my way out. is there any other?
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SupremeDreamer @ 64.9.233.156
> INTRANSIT
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5-Sep-08/6:54 PM
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You think you're in a slow spot? I'm in gridlock on the 101 North carpool lane gettin out of Hollywood & the smog hell shroud of LA. Inspiration hasn't had an electric storm in my area for sometime;- sad days for a veteran lightning rod.
worn boots that don't know snow...good line...
Pablo Escobar.
I think the last line should be: "I'd have been better than Pablo." And may I suggest the title "Rebirth & Cocaine Jungles."?
I love "drank till my nerves were /wired like an afro". Well done.
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