I'd go with not a good poem personally.

The first 4 lines open a fine stage to play on. The last 2 lines wrap it up just fine. But whatever falls between needs some major tuning.

I'm glad that people have found this poem difficult to read.. that was the purpose! lol It was supposed to demonstrate a process rather than a product.

PUT THIS IN THE TATE MODERN. WHAT ARE YOU ABOUT? IS THIS POEM A MIDDLE AGED NEW YORK FEM? WHERE DOES IT WANT? IF ANY? NOT FOR ME BUT EXPLAIN CAUSE I CANNIE SEE THE COLOUR[COLOR, FOR YOU IN THE U.S.]

No one has actually commented on the intent of the poem. I've received many talking about the 'nature' of this poem - that it is about landscapes and one-ness with the earth. It was actually about seeking an orgasmic experience.. go figure.

Knowing a little of the situation that surrounds the writing of this poem, I'm moved greatly by this. Congratulations Chesty - I hope that the person it was intended for has read it!

!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! After 6 long years I have returned to poemranker. God this is awkward...

Thank you Nentwined... I suppose the my verbosity overflows into my poetry. I speak very much as I write - just like Regency Ladies - twittering mindlessly, repetitiously covering the same inadequate sayings endeavouring to get my point across. I appreciate all the comments I receive from others on this site.

funny, could make the last 5 words a new line

The facetious last word is great with pretty Pleasantville, bloody and impaled on a white picket fence.

Goes on a bit too much for old Sexton here, also contradiction in many many places where intent WAS NOT MEANT!

P.S. That box will be MINE. What, you thought you were the only person who knew where the Guadalupe River was? San Jose native speaking.

Hi Jess, good to see you around. What's happening and how have you been ? Good to see your poem here.

I think I read this many times and fail to see how I didnt comment on it. Its lovely writing. BTW - I tried mailing you a couple of times on your social network page and your mailing add, but it looks like you dont use them anymore. however , if you get this message, send me a test mail. Anyway, hows everything and what's happening with you.

TUT TUT TUT.still 7 though

I love it, a bit weird but still gr8 BUT there is just one thing its all about cat shit!

I LIKE IT.MY COMMENT IS A BIT SHORT BUT OH WELL.(AT LEAST I COMMENTED).

lol

you made me miserable.

typo, so a 9 [is is] OH GO ON THEN 10 I OFTEN MAKEA DA MISTAKAAAAAAAAAAAAAA.............