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Childhood Memories (Other) by Jessina
Beyond the farthest sphere
Rainbow flaunted its myriad hue
Buds of shimmering memories rose
Fervently like gurgling streams
Tingling my heartâs rope
Of those gorgeous days
Merrily dancing and singing
Along with happy buddies
Full of fun and cheer
Playing hide and seek
Plucking jasmine flowers
Ardently chasing fluttering butterflies
A great delight to countless eyes
Gently grabbing the petals of love
That comes from high
With a gentle sigh
Celestial bliss of true comradeship
Gone are those delightful days
Busy now in concrete jungle
Away from lifeâs musical jingle
How poignant this would be
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Arithmetic Mean: 7.5
Weighted score: 5.1185646
Overall Rank: 5958
Posted: July 7, 2008 9:22 AM PDT; Last modified: July 7, 2008 9:22 AM PDT
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How poignant this would be
if it didn't remind us of hallmark cards and
the sweet nothings; words combined that sound good--
and say nothing. Your poem plays hide and seek.
Hidden is the expression, while the reader seeks
the point of the poem.
How poignant this would be:
If you hadn't tried so hard to be poignant
and miserably failed.
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No Vote. Though, in all honesty? This should get a zero.