SupremeDreamer9 Jul 2008

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How poignant this would be
if it didn't remind us of hallmark cards and
the sweet nothings; words combined that sound good--
and say nothing. Your poem plays hide and seek.
Hidden is the expression, while the reader seeks
the point of the poem.

How poignant this would be:

If you hadn't tried so hard to be poignant
and miserably failed.

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No Vote. Though, in all honesty? This should get a zero.